Wednesday, April 11, 2018

Rooms I've Left

Each a tomb
with a Sisyphus stone,
these are the rooms I've left.

The cheap motel room;
worn carpet
thick with tv glass.

The classroom;
slick tiled,
not even a window
to jump from.

The death room;
the rigor mortis
the I'm fine rictus
of grief.

Outside, my Mary Magdalene;
darling, where
have you been?


Fireblossom said...

Uni doesn't like this one, either. Uni knows zero about poetry, though. I like the construction of it...boom, boom, boom, twist.

S said...

Kell, the last two stanzas ... whew. Physical response, big time.

Kerry O'Connor said...

The classroom;
slick tiled,
not even a window
to jump from....

I could not help but laugh when I got to these lines - you don't know how many times, I as the teacher, look longingly out my window, wishing to make that leap.

Margaret said...

Love the reference to Sisyphus and his rolling stone doomed to always escape him downhill! Your poetry always explodes with such intelligence and clever twists...

Other Mary said...

Oh those rooms... And I love that you ended with Mary M.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I resonate with the "I'm fine rictus of grief". Wow.

Toni Spencer said...

Intelligent and clever. the stone of Sisyphus, the windows in the schoolroom from which I (we) wish to jump...the rictus of grief - all of it. Wonderful

Kim Russell said...

Amazing writing, Mama Zen! I ,love the 'tomb with a Sisyphus stone' and 'the rigor mortis / the I'm fine rictus of grief'.

Ellecee said...

Powerful writing, I relate to these lines:
"Each a tomb with a Sisyphus stone," and
"I'm fine rictus of grief."
Unique and special,, :-)

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

But good that you have left them! And been resurrected?

Sioux Roslawski said...

Jesus! (That seems apropos, given the Mary Magdalene line.) The "I'm fine rictus" was one of my favorites, but this one is jim-jammed with so many jewels.

(And Kerry is right. It's the teachers--not the students--who are screaming and tantrumming and wanting to jump out the windows.)

Sanaa Rizvi said...

I resonate with "The classroom; slick tiled, not even a window to jump from".. Beautifully executed!💞

lynn__ said...

Just "wow"...powerful!