Sunday, February 11, 2018

Gravity Fell

Gravity

fell last night
and proved its own existence.

I hummed Freud and swept the bar
a pearl beneath my tongue.

My family's in formaldehyde
awaiting resurrection.

Septic with their shadows,
I'm 48 and dying Jung.

For Poetry Pantry at Poets United

17 comments:

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This is very clever wordplay, kiddo. I loved it.

Donna@LivingFromHappiness said...

Oh I enjoyed this...always a joy to read through your clever lines!

R.K. Garon said...

Hahaha.... OK... very clever.
ZQ

brudberg said...

Love the Freud to Jung.. very clever.

said...

You're a damn genius, baby.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

What a clever write! Loved it!

colleen Looseleafnotes said...

This is one I wish I had written. Love it, the Freud, the Jung, the septic shadows, the family in formaldehyde and gravity falling!

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Ha! I especially love your closing pun.

gillena cox said...

Nice one. And thanks for dropping by my blog today

Much💚love

Mary said...

Clever! "Jung" made me smile.

Wendy Bourke said...

I agree with many of the comments: really clever wordplay. The intriguing nuances are a marvel - pinned against the psychology-of-the-human-mind 'name drops' ... they inspired. This is brilliant!

Toni Spencer said...

Clever closing! The images in this - your family in formaldehyde...exquisite.

Old Egg said...

Clever and amusing, I really enjoyed it.

Sanaa Rizvi said...

This is quite brilliant! Especially love the closing pun!

Debi Swim said...

Very clever but with a punch

Susan Anderson said...

Deftly done!

kaykuala said...

Love the twist of humor accompanying this, MZ!

Hank