Thursday, June 22, 2017

Whatever Metafiction Gets You Through The Night

I cannot call you mine;
let me call you to the line
break -

I miss  you.

I miss you like a misplaced heart.
Like I'm an incomplete constellation
and the starless space of you is a scar.
I miss you         some other, better metaphor.

Every syllable of me is stressed.
My symbolism undressed.
All I have left
is naked longing.

Sonnets written for you.
Bitten from the neck for you.
Nocturnes, aubades,
couplets coupling in between.
And

this - this flawed
flowless piece of free verse
written by a poet
anything but free.

For Kerry's prompt at Real Toads

15 comments:

brudberg said...

Love it.. the metaphors and the anything but free...

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love it too.. full of irony and self-reflection, yes, but beautiful in conveying the longing, the connection.. the thing we try to put into words.

Gillena Cox said...

Nice, luv the Line breaks image; much though and stumbling happens there

much love...

Fireblossom said...

This is amazing.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Wow, I love it. I think you totally aced it. Most of all I love the sonnets 'Bitten from the neck'.

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Sonnets written for you.
Bitten from the neck for you.
Nocturnes, aubades,
couplets coupling in between.

Gorgeous!!❤️

Martin Kloess said...

Well expressed moment. When we miss someone, we come undone and our heart flows.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh, wow. After reading this, how can i even try? You are brilliant, kiddo. This is too good.

angieinspired said...

and you wondered if you even hit the mark?? you're the best

Debi Swim said...

I don't even have a favorite line - they are all perfect.

Magaly Guerrero said...

I read your comment at The Garden and, are you insane?! I mean, I've never tried this genre/form before, but goodness gracious, my heart is certain that this is what is supposed to be. A line-break never showed this much, a metaphor never wished to be something else this badly... Your poem is alive, bleeding, missing its subject, so real.

Rene said...

Damn, this is crazy good. I guess I missed it somehow.

The line break part is my favorite.

The Bizza said...

This is exquisite. Love everything about it.

Marcoantonio Arellano said...

You are the reason I love visiting this site. You and most of all in this site are so scarred and talented. It sates my soul.
gracias!

Julian said...

Very clever piece or writing................
Every syllable of me is stressed.
My symbolism undressed.
All I have left
is naked longing.......most enjoyable