Monday, June 19, 2017

Pepper Spray Eyes

What I need now -
     pennies weighting your pepper spray eyes.
          Did I speak aloud?
Surely, not I.

This love is wrongs
     wrapped in placental shrouds throats
          clogged with feather down
tongues tied.

It's the dog at her dead master's feet
that gets buried alive.

A quadrille for Kim at dVerse

23 comments:

grapeling said...

grim. or perhaps, Grimm's, where it would fit superbly. ~

Frank Hubeny said...

Interesting ending about the dog and her master.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Ack! Poor dog! I must check out this prompt! Yikes.

estella said...

Incredible, MZ. I loved every word and image, but (what I perceive in) the opening is definitely my favorite:

"What I need now -
pennies [panties] weighting your pepper spray eyes"

Powerful work, regardless of your intention or my perception. The closing image is also haunting.

rhymeswithbug.com said...

"did I speak aloud" - Love that line! this deserves to be read many times. I think there is much to discover in these 44 words.

Victoria Ceretto-Slotto said...

For me the words haunting and disturbing come to mind--maybe it's more about the emotions you elicit. Wow!

Kim Russell said...

Wow, Mama Zen! '... pennies weighting your pepper spray eyes' and '... love is wrongs wrapped in placental shrouds' - diving deep into darkness today.
And I feel so sorry for the dog.

brudberg said...

The pepper-spray eyes and the coins on the eyes... death leading up to that dog being buried alive... reminds me of that image of "his master's voice"...

Alison H said...

This had so much power - love is wrongs wrapped in placental shrouds- it made me want to cry for my children.

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Unforgettable write, MZ!

Mark Walters said...

pennies on pepper spray eyes, that's a lot to take in. And the dog buried with his dead master. Lots of darkness there

Truedessa said...

I think pepper spray burns the eyes creating moments of darkness.

lynn__ said...

Weird, wild, and weighty...write on!

welshstream said...

Just a brilliant piece of writing - some great poetry in our minds that rarely gets spoken aloud!

Nosaint said...

I really enjoyed this. The first lines were a great hook and the last had a lot of impact. "Placental shrouds" was especially moving. A lot for a reader to get into in this poem!

Fireblossom said...

The opening stanza is striking. Can't handle the dog part.

Kathy Reed said...

Wow...another poetic genius today!!

Sarah Russell said...

Great dark imagery!

lillianthehomepoet.wordpress.com said...

From the dark side....so much to read into that dog, lying dead at the master's feet....why?

Other Mary said...

That's a powerful 44!

indybev said...


Marvelously macabre!

indybev said...


Marvelously macabre.

Thotpurge said...

goodness..didn't expect the dark ending, poor dog.