Saturday, January 28, 2017

Poem

Poem, be wren swift and sing.
Be shapely as woman's warm thigh.
Play young with words and be wanton.
Then let lie.

For Kim's prompt at Real Toads

18 comments:

Magaly Guerrero said...

I love the idea of being "wanton" with words. Delicious.

Kim Russell said...

I love this, Mama Zen, short and sweet - and I too love the idea of being 'wanton' with words. And 'wanton' sounds a little like a Chinese dumpling - a 'wonton'. 'Then let lie' sums up Neruda's message so well.

brudberg said...

The contrast in this is exactly what I love with Neruda... what a wonderful condensation.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Total brilliance! Such a wonderful expression of Neruda's idea in different metaphors.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh my goodness. This is so superb I ask myself: why even try? LOL. But I will. Tomorrow. Absolutely superb writing, Mama Zen.

angieinspired said...

W, w, w, w Wonderful

Sioux said...

MZ--This is beyond brilliant.

I have a framed poem of Shay's in my writing room. It's a poem she wrote for me. (She had a contest on her blog, and the winner got a poem.)

I hope you don't mind, but I am going to type this poem up in a larger font, frame it, and hang it up somewhere around my desk. It induces gaping-mouth syndrome...

thequarrelwithmyself said...

Wow, this is amazing!

Margaret said...

Delicious! Boy can you compete with the big boys... Pablo N. would be honored!

Sara McNulty said...

Neruda would love, 'wanton words.' Excellent condensing!

Debi Swim said...

Amazing work. I am so impressed and not a little jealous.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Chop that fucking chatterbox Neruda down to size. Bril.

Other Mary said...

Gorgeous - and so very Zen.

rhymeswithbug.com said...

Spot on! What a wanton little poem.;-)

Susie Clevenger said...

Perfect!

Fireblossom said...

ooh, my poem and MZ's poem on Sioux's wall.

Bekkie Sanchez said...

Wonderful!

said...

You and I want the same elements in poetry: beauty, music, sex appeal, warmth, a childlike spirit, hunger and passion, and most importantly, some dishonesty ... fiction, as it were. Oh, and brevity, of course --- along with some cuts and bruises.