I love the idea of being "wanton" with words. Delicious.
I love this, Mama Zen, short and sweet - and I too love the idea of being 'wanton' with words. And 'wanton' sounds a little like a Chinese dumpling - a 'wonton'. 'Then let lie' sums up Neruda's message so well.
The contrast in this is exactly what I love with Neruda... what a wonderful condensation.
Total brilliance! Such a wonderful expression of Neruda's idea in different metaphors.
Oh my goodness. This is so superb I ask myself: why even try? LOL. But I will. Tomorrow. Absolutely superb writing, Mama Zen.
W, w, w, w Wonderful
MZ--This is beyond brilliant.I have a framed poem of Shay's in my writing room. It's a poem she wrote for me. (She had a contest on her blog, and the winner got a poem.)I hope you don't mind, but I am going to type this poem up in a larger font, frame it, and hang it up somewhere around my desk. It induces gaping-mouth syndrome...
Wow, this is amazing!
Delicious! Boy can you compete with the big boys... Pablo N. would be honored!
Neruda would love, 'wanton words.' Excellent condensing!
Amazing work. I am so impressed and not a little jealous.
Chop that fucking chatterbox Neruda down to size. Bril.
Gorgeous - and so very Zen.
Spot on! What a wanton little poem.;-)
ooh, my poem and MZ's poem on Sioux's wall.
You and I want the same elements in poetry: beauty, music, sex appeal, warmth, a childlike spirit, hunger and passion, and most importantly, some dishonesty ... fiction, as it were. Oh, and brevity, of course --- along with some cuts and bruises.
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