Thursday, December 22, 2016

Untitled (Stripped)

"Untitled" (America #1) - Felix Gonzalez-Torres
(Untitled) America #1, Felix Gonzalez Torres


this started 
out as a sonnet,
then I stripped it

syllable
by syllable
as you like it

skin from muscle
muscle from bone
to narrow
marrow meaning

a bare bulb swinging
shadows
and throwing heat

For Kerry's prompt at Real Toads

19 comments:

Magaly Guerrero said...

I do love it when you strip.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow! Stripped to the bone, perfectly.

Fireblossom said...

Do you have a velvet painting of dogs playing strip sonnets?

Margaret said...

A perfect description of your style of poetry! I love it. Although, your longer poems rock too.

Sioux said...

MZ--Your poem made me open my mouth in amazement, and then Shay's comment made me laugh.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Aww, MZ, you spoil me! I am smiling with tears in my eyes. Just brilliant!

Sanaa Rizvi said...

You totally rocked the prompt!!❤️

brudberg said...

Wonderful. Sometimes less is simply more

blueoran said...

Occam's flouncy razor here, flaying everything to bare all. Tuck this fiver in its garter. More!

Kim Russell said...

You certainly got it down to its bare bones, Mama Zen, and your poem is doing a naked shimmy! Wonderful!

Rommy said...

This was wonderfully witty. I smiled at this pared down sonnet. It still communicates beautifully on it's bare bones.

Gillena Cox said...

Strip tease; Ahem, luvved this

much love...

angieinspired said...

throwing some heat:)

S said...

I've made this be about myself by turning "Stripped" into "S tripped." It's one of my special gifts, actually.

razzamadazzle said...

Love your stripped sonnet!

S said...

The bare bulb swinging makes me think of an interrogation or a creepy basement ... kidnapping, torture. But you ended up capturing your captor because of the sexy, artistic way you expose your layers, piece by piece.

howanxious said...

Such an evocative stripping.
The layers are finely defined and every word aptly flows to another. The beat is like that of a cascading river.I really like it.
-HA

Debi Swim said...

"this started
out as a sonnet" I love how you did this. Stripped to bare bone really grabs the truth

grapeling said...

ha! what Magaly said