Thursday, July 21, 2016

Lord, It's Hot

Perspire turned to sweat
ten degrees ago.  My ponytail
drags dew thick dirt, and my alligator
curls at my feet.  She is the mother
of deadlines and reptilian
revisions, quick slashes,
aggressive, quick, efficient punctuation,
and bare bones evolution.
Dainty deadly, she demands
coldblooded treks
through swamps, sewers, strip
malls, and cemeteries.
Bring out your dead!  Bring out your dead!
The art is in the autopsy,
someone should have said -
but, Lord, it's hot
and hard to be quicker than the rot.

For Hannah's prompt at Real Toads

18 comments:

gillena cox said...

Raise your complaint Mama those alligators are not man made.

Much love...

Hannah said...

I enjoyed the metaphorical use of the alligator for this, Mama Zen...works well! Thank you, for joining in!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

The art is in the autopsy - wow! Killer line. I like that she drags you through sewers and strip malls...........as always, you rocked the prompt.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

That's how I feel right now. Loved.

Jim said...

Oh yes, MomZee, alligators love the autopsy bit if they aren't curling at your feet. A fun read.
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brudberg said...

Oh yes.. I hate editing... but yes I would need that alligator... to bark beside me...

Stacie Eirich said...

Oh brutal! Alligators abound here in Louisiana, so I read this with a nodding of my head, thinking of the signs posted at our lakefront in warning! Thanks for sharing your totem. :-)

piano warm said...

Hee hee. I love you. :) I will treasure this poem forever. It's so perfect, I don't need to say a word.

On a related note, my KIDS found a baby alligator in their grandpa's yard not too long ago while their daddy was mowing.

~Seriously, sitting right at my daughter's feet.

Ginny Brannan said...

Hard to think of much else except the heat when it is so hot!! (Here in MA too!!) I like how you wove the alligator into this as your "spirit" animal.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Fun to read, if not to experience.

HA said...

Ha! That's such a witty piece.
Very well penned. :-)
-HA

Kerry O'Connor said...

The perfect totem for you, MZ
:-)
I love how you set up the whole scenario, with crocodile both literal and figurative.

Susie Clevenger said...

"the art is in the autopsy" Love that. Perfect Mama Zen

Fireblossom said...

ditto Susie's comment.

Bekkie Sanchez said...

Clever and stunning at the same time! Love it!

blueoran said...

I ignore my gator and my revisions are always later and rot ... it's why you can launch so many pocket rockets. Those final five lines are the very snout and jaws.

blueoran said...

Breviary or bestiary, this one is perfect for either. The faith is unvarnished and the encounter pure. Great work, Sherry.

Kim M. Russell said...

I love this, Mama Zen! These lines particularly stood out for me:
'She is the mother
of deadlines and reptilian
revisions, quick slashes,
aggressive, quick, efficient punctuation,
and bare bones evolution.'