Sunday, March 6, 2016

ESP

When you told everyone I had ESP-
extreme stalker potential -
you robbed me

of the radiance of your smile     how many miles
did I drag you
to shape and curve that skin again      every night

has its errors
and terrors        every town
has its open all night

car wash

for the messy side
of love.

55 extreme words for Kerry at Real Toads.  Also submitted to Poetry Pantry.

26 comments:

Fireblossom said...

Okay, that's just disturbing.

R.K. Garon said...

Haha Yes

" every town
has its open all night

car wash

for the messier side
of love."

ZQ

Anonymous said...

Brilliant. Every syllable.

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Fabulous 55 :D

Outlawyer said...

Ha. This is just terrific, MZ. Thanks. k.

brudberg said...

Now I will never think of a carwash the same way again..

Kerry O'Connor said...

You portray the messier side of love with a fine art here, a portrait of disappointment, of one bereft. I think we all have a little of the ESP, even when we do not want to know the inevitable outcome.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Brilliant that open all night car wash.......

Sylvia K said...

Ah, no one says/writes it better!! I guess to everything, including love, there are always two sides!! Enjoy the good side today though, MZ!!

Other Mary said...

Bahahaha - love it! Love it to death!

liv2write2day said...

This suggests the plot for a dark novel. That car wash raises all kinds of questions.

Truedessa said...

the betrayal of a secret and the ramifications that follow.

Susie Clevenger said...

Wow! This is dark, but I love it!

Gillena Cox said...

I'll just say WOW

Much love...

headed-north said...

Dark humor can be a gift in certain circumstances,

Elizabeth

James Toma said...

Yup...someone's beauty can be erased by his or her unbecoming traits. good write!

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

I love the way you say it then stop – no frills but every one of the 55 words counting. ,

grapeling said...

yeah i was too cloistered to have even thought of that use.

and for SURE Galen woulda been clapping on this one. ~

Sumana Roy said...

Wow!

Luk Lei said...

I am cheering from the bleachers on this. ESP, very nice play on the acronym.

Carol Campbell said...

Dark and powerful!

Jae Rose said...

Maybe it's my dark mind but i found that car wash made me chuckle - love is a fickle old wagon

Magaly Guerrero said...

The speaker's ESP made me giggle. ;-)

colleen said...

I love this. Every shape and curve ... every night with errors and terrors ... open all night ... and the car wash!

Helen said...

~~ At the Car Wash. Let's set your poem to music, shall we?

Bekkie Sanchez said...

What would be the name of a car wash like that?