Saturday, February 27, 2016

Dis Song

Dis song be de bastard chile
of Lie and sweet Lament;
dey went lyin wid each other
on de wrong side of de bed.
When Lament she start to showin,
Lie jus turn his head.
Now Lie lyin dreadful quiet;
de graveyard what he get.

For Gillena's prompt at Real Toads

18 comments:

Kerry O'Connor said...

Wow! This has my eyes out on stalks! Just amazingly well done.

Victoria said...

When I saw this prompt I had to scratch my head...but you seemed to have mastered it. Impressive.

brudberg said...

I regret I linked up at all... you did it... Love the tone...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

LOL at Kerry's comment. This is superb in every way. Wowzers!

Rommy said...

Not only did you nail the basics of the assignment, you took it a whole level deeper. Really well done!

Sioux said...

Mama Zen--Great balls of fire!

rhymeswithbug.com said...

oh yes! you nailed it!

Jim said...

He had it comin' to him.
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grapeling said...

yeah ok this cured me of posting anything. :) ~

Sumana Roy said...

'Lie' has a play element within it, only the brave ones dare :)

Brendan MacOdrum said...

Home run again MZ -- a pocket nuke. I wonder if everyone's a child of such wild poles. Or become so.

Gillena Cox said...

What else can i say, but, "Go to the head of the class"!!! well done, the swagger of the dialect just sold me. The wit is sharp and the pieces of the puzzle fall into place under the skillful readings of fellow toads.

I must say the dialect in the video, had me wondering should i have used it, at all, but then i said to myself go for it

Wow yours is the first i've read, and i'm really impressed: Now i'm off to read the rest

much love...

Magaly Guerrero said...

I would love to listen to you read this piece. I just know that your hands will dance to the lines... This is wonderful.

Gail said...

Purple ribbon, Best in Show, Grand Champion!

De said...

Holy cow! YEP! Awesomeness here.

Bekkie Sanchez said...

This has awesome flavor! I still don't have any idea as to what to write! Lol!

Fireblossom said...

body count ^^^

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Yikes! Scary good in yo neighborhood.