Saturday, October 10, 2015

Hoopskirt

I like my heroes tragic,
my nights misty,
my bodice ripped,
and the way you kiss me
rough and hard;
you take my breath.
Now, get me out
of this goddamn dress.

Up Close and Personal in 10 lines or less for Kerry at Real Toads

19 comments:

Gail said...

This is fantastic!

I can't pick a favorite line because I love them all. You took these hidden words from my deepest part and splattered them on the page. Great!

Sylvia K said...

Oh, you have made my evening, MZ!! I love it!!

Sioux said...

That ending--perfect!

brudberg said...

Sounds like a perfect night. Love it,

Gemma Wiseman said...

Vibrant with impassioned energy. A mover and a shaker.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Haha! I love it! Yes, the demure exterior may well hide a raging passion beneath.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

LOL, wonderful ending to wonderful poem.

Jim said...

Nice smile provoking piece, M. Zee. Brings memories of days (nights ?) past. Wish now there were some still.
Bra hooks are worse for guys than most dresses. Still we mostly all manage to continue.
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Jim said...

BTW, some days I am a robot. I hate to lie just to get past your comment gate.
Most times I tell it after knocking three times, "I was sent by Joe." Works every time.
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Fireblossom said...

I love it. But....was this challenge terribly difficult for you? Being brief, I mean? LOL.

blueoran said...

Hoop skirts and hook bras, the quickie's laugh and ineptitude's fool cap. Amen and ahem.

hedgewitch said...

Ha! You know I love the hoop-age and the drape of sumptuous ornateness we have given up(probably wisely) for comfort and ..um, easy access. This is why fantasies are more fun than the thwarting frustration of all that elaborate display of stylized femininity probably really was.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Although I think there is something to be said for being under the skirts! Loved this MZ!

Gillena Cox said...

Full blooded passion in such a tiny dose

Much love...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Up close and personal, with pithy perfection.

Susan said...

Very personal passion. Making him jump through the hoops ASAP.

Outlawyer said...

Super charming, MZ--love the tone and the rhyme--all works. k.

Glenn Buttkus said...

For some reason, perhaps the apparel, I picked up a Tom Jones aristocratic tryst, when the hair comes down, & the fluids are exchanged; sensuality tripled within tiny parameters.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Brilliant. I wish I knew men like that...
Anna :o]