Intense.. not to mention dark and thought-provoking! Excellent write :)
Ah, yes, intense and dark it is and terrific as always!! Hope your weekend is going well, MZ!! Enjoy!!
I love this, especially "my peculiar madness".
Pitch-perfect...the line breaks and delivery are powerful, MZ!
Daylight's just a fracture... What a powerful way to write about darkness.
"Daylight's just a fracture / in the blackness." i like that streak of hope...
Turning the old saw on its ears brings a darker and deeper cut to the words here--even daylight is a broken thing, and the senses torture instead of sustain...this poet's work is very like that, and you've mined his (and your own) vein of darkness well here, MZ--the mind is the worst cage there can be.
"whore/moans"...girl, you're killin' me here. When I think of sweating up the sheets, I never thought it would be THIS way!
That is an ending killer line ~ Thanks for linking up with Sunday's Challenge ~
Distilled darkness--cutting out the tongue to kill the taste is a very powerful image--one feels it is the taste of words and experience that is so terrible. don't think much is wasted here. Thanks. k.
"Daylight's just a fracture in the blackness" is a gorgeous line. I also love the play between "waste" and "want."As usual, you piss me off with your talent. ;)
This made me cry a little bit:"Cut out my tongue to kill the taste.And, wanting not, I wastemy peculiar madness."
I can see the inspiration od Celan, but this strong piece is very much your own style. It is dark, but ever so human in its description.
wow, someday poets will be asked to write in the style of Mama Zen and we will try but fail to reach your level.
Brilliant last line! Thought provoking. Wonder if all of us have a peculiar madness to waste.Leo @ I Rhyme Without Reason
I love how in so few words, you can move so much tense emotion."Daylight's just a fracture/in the blackness" Is brilliant!
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