Thursday, July 23, 2015

Sunrise Ruins

Sunrise ruins a dream
of speaking

shimmers of heat
and fear/offering

so much of me

that nothing needs
or wants to feed anymore.

It's sad, sorry, spineless relief
this being kept and becoming meat.
Losing tongue / keeping teeth
and silence

saltybittersweet

For M's prompt at Real Toads

13 comments:

Sylvia K said...

Ah, just what I needed to read tonight!! Thanks as always, MZ!! Hope you have a great weekend with lots of laughter and fun!!

Fireblossom said...

This is both fierce and resigned, and as dark as an eclipse. The last few lines are worded perfectly.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I find the phrasing perfect throughout - never a word wasted in expressing in-depth ideology.

Marion Lawless said...

"...becoming meat." Indeed. This crawls up under my skin & wiggles around. xo

Sumana Roy said...

"Losing tongue / keeping teeth / and silence"...gritty.

hedgewitch said...

"It's sad, sorry, spineless relief
this being kept and becoming meat." Oh, the poet-envy you gave me with that! Dark beauty and even darker things on the plate of this poem, MZ--fine, fine writing.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Yes, I know that feeling, giving so much of oneself no one wants it any more....and the silence and gritted teeth. You have written this as truly as it can be said. I agree with Shay - "fierce and resigned".

Outlawyer said...

Agree with Joy and Kerry--this is very intense and compelling--becoming meat-losing tongue--keeping teeth--how do we manage it? Thanks, MZ. k.

Ella said...

Losing tongue ripples into the shards of wonder~ Yes, you are fierce

Sweeper of Dreams said...

quite strong, this. for some reason, the "becoming meat" part reminded me of some Doctor Whos and Torchwoods... anywho, i really liked your poem. upon second and third readings, i keep coming back to "losing tongue/ keeping teeth and silence" and i keep reading it as "losing teeth / keeping tongue and silence." anywho, kudos!

Gail said...

Bitter sweet! Packs a punch. I like.

grapeling said...

I wish I could write like you. That verse that HW cites... damn. Thanks for adding your pen ~

C.C. said...

I am in love with that first line....