Tuesday, July 14, 2015

Country Road

I pull verbs
from your summer
sticky
black-
top.

Nouns
from your ditches
deep with weeds.

I string them
like barbed wire
through the fence
posts.

My sentence -
This heart
cannot
leave.

For The Tuesday Platform at Real Toads

23 comments:

Susan said...

I felt this fall into place: grammar and sentence and true word play. Country roads!

Kim Nelson said...

Brilliant.

Marion Lawless said...

Delicious words!! xo

Gail said...

Again, you raised the bar for the rest of us.

thotpurge said...

Enjoyed the wordplay!

Sylvia K said...

Terrific as always and, as always, a great start for my day! Have a beautiful one!

manicddaily said...

There is a strong double-meaning in the sentence here and the barbed wire of that sticky-blacktopped road. Really well done, MZ. k.

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Such a brilliant piece :D
Beautifully executed :D

Lots of love,
Sanaa

Kerry O'Connor said...

At last! You reveal the secret of your success as a poet...

:-)

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Love the imagery and play on words.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Love the imagery and play on words.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Deft and heart-tugging at once.

Fireblossom said...

You are just awfully good at this. No one but you writes quite this way, though we would all like to.

I. said...

I love what you did with your line breaks, turning the road into a sweaty shirt. And then the way you offered multiple meanings in words like "ditches" (abandonments/breakups), "weeds" (we'[woul]ds), "fence" (fighting), "posts" (writing), and then the obvious one, "sentence."

blueoran said...

Honkytonk (well, Emmylou) Whitman out in a Kansas there is no Oz for and all of it reveals the heart and heat of a place in a life. In words more precious than promises. Sigh and amen.

Jim said...

Nice, fun, M.Z.
We're there some more for me?
I found these, one (please) was soggy: "If you go, please come back."
..

Marian said...

Fantastically clever, and I totally relate.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

"This heart cannot leave." Written in barbed wire. I so get that.

Gillena Cox said...

aw! this is cutting edge
thanks for dropping in to read mine

much love...

Rommy said...

Just some amazing and wonderful simplicity. It really speaks to me about how a place really can be part of your soul.

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grapeling said...

so obviously I'm going backwards but what else is new. this, however... nothing backwards about it at all. ~