Thursday, June 25, 2015

A Girl Is Born

to spit fire,
Mother.
To turn from some worm
of a man.
To be claw and beak
not his sweet, dark dirt
to flow through.

To bite the hand,
Mother.
To bite the hand that feeds her
in two.
To spit fire,
Mother.
To be fire,
Mother,
like you.

For Words Count at Real Toads

23 comments:

Susan said...

Wow! It's long and thin and a direct mother to daughter line. SO great to have a role model!

kaykuala said...

Obviously the Mother means a lot to the little girl! Great lines MZ!

Hank

Sioux said...

Was it 49? Did I count right?

You can write something searing with just a few words. Amazing.

Sioux said...

Was it 49? Did I count right?

You can write something searing with just a few words. Amazing.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

"To be fire, Mother, like you." You are teaching that girl RIGHT, kiddo! Loved this, especially the claw and beak!!!!!

Margaret said...

To be independent and "fierce" ... to rely upon herself - to expect a man to be worthy. All quite valuable lessons to learn early. (I have four girls and I think they are on the right track...)

Fireblossom said...

Whoa, damn! This is SO cool. That line about the dirt to flow through is something else.

Hannah said...

So intense!! You have a magic way of closing always and this one does it, too!! Love it...thank you, for the challenge, MZ!

Jim said...

A wonderful poem, Mom Z, about an old fire spitting, mean mother. All in 53 words with title. I love to see how the originator of the prompt writes. Thank you for both the prompt and your poem.
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Kerry O'Connor said...

This gave me chills from head to toe. To be the mother of daughters is the most remarkable thing.

hedgewitch said...

Amazing what a little thing like how the most commonplace words are arranged can take something from nothing and make it explode--the definition of poetry, I suppose. Just excellent, MZ, and full of fire and bite in the best way.

welshstream said...

That is an amazingly powerful poem and sparsely written to drive home the point. Wonderful stuff.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Wonderful! The power of the female. :-)

Sylvia K said...

Ah, you can say SO much with so few words, MZ!! Thank you as always!!

georgeplaceblog said...

I love the power in this. Teaching our daughters!

Lolamouse said...

Teach your children well!

C.C. said...

Wow. Breathtaking!

Herotomost said...

Ohhh yeah...that is mighty potent. Reminded me of Pink Floyd "mother"
don't crucify me for my 62 word poem...just pretend like its 58. Great list!!

brudberg said...

I just saw a documentary of a tigress that stayed on the throne for 10 years.. Something intensely feline in this poem

grapeling said...

damn. sharp; perfect. ~

Gail said...

That all girls were born strong!

rhymeswithbug said...

Bravo!

Sweeper of Dreams said...

oooh, fantastic! your placement of repetition was like a primal drum beat - certainly called up something in my blood! Beautiful.