Sunday, May 31, 2015

Fear

Fear has a smell - hops caught
in the teeth.  Got a hymn
to the hymen.  Got
dark, dim

hands that splay-finger shade
and go where the girl goes
to first blood her glade;
it flows where the girl flows.

Here lies
the truth of the first cast stone:
fear never dies
it just changes its tone

and its look; a hay field or manicured lawn,
it goes where the girl goes. The fear's never gone.

For Bjorn's prompt at Real Toads

16 comments:

Fireblossom said...

I like the repeated line of going where the girl goes.

Helen said...

Chilling ~ 'fear never dies, it just changes its tone' ~ well done, MZ.

Gail said...

Fear is real in this...

brudberg said...

So many things to like in this.. the hymn hymen.. the fear and the blood.. sometimes I'm ashamed to be a man.

Sylvia K said...

The fear is real indeed, MZ, and as always, the picture you create with words shows/says it all!!

Hannah said...

What a difficult important poem...powerful, MZ!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Fantastic response to the prompt. I love it.

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Quite a powerful poem! I like your take on this prompt :)
xoxo

Outlawyer said...

Fills me with fear. Very sad. Thanks, MZ. k.

debispoems said...

the truth of the first cast stone:
fear never dies
it just changes its tone... well done

Margaret said...

Wow - The burden of being a victim - Getting on with life isn't easy and often is a life-long struggle to push the fear away. Powerful.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Here lies
the truth of the first cast stone:
fear never dies
it just changes its tone..

This is an amazing use of the given rhymes, the flow is like water down a hillside. Excellent.

R.K. Garon said...

Well... very nice...dark, but well said/written.
ZQ

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Whew! So true - and so clearly expressed.

grapeling said...

that 2nd line - got a hymn - I substituted 'him', and... yeah, that fear never goes. chilling, MZ ~

Jinksy said...

You did a great job playing with the given rhymes. :-)