Wednesday, April 15, 2015

A Woman's Folly

I am creating
a wholesome man
of calcium and clay.

Like God did.
Like my mom did.
But mine will never stray

from the garden;
once he hardens,
he'll belong to me.

I am creating
a wholesome man
for my unwholesome Eve.

Some folly for Hedge's prompt at Real Toads

25 comments:

Katy Magee said...

Oh yes, the myth of being the woman who makes the man... frickin poisonous socialization. Nice to see something good (this poem) has come from it.

Well said. Well said indeed.

Helen said...

Let's hear it for the girl!!

hedgewitch said...

Smiling even as I feel thoroughly creeped out--I think at one point or another, I have seen a Folly like this in my own backyard, among other places--and love the parallels of Biblical proportions--thanks for bringing your builder's pen to the playground, MZ.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Love the rhyme of garden and harden. I love your idea, although he sounds like a plaster caster disaster. Yes, let's start a band, name idea: MamaBuddah or ZenMoskowitz.

Sylvia K said...

You are the best, as always. You can surely create one for me!

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Oooh I do love the idea of a woman behind the success of a man! After all we are considered the better half! :D
Lovely poem :D
xoxo

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Dang, why didnt I think of that? Too soon old, too late smart, LOL.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Dang, why didnt I think of that? Too soon old, too late smart, LOL.

Hannah said...

Perfect, MZ! I love your contrasting statements.

Mark Kerstetter said...

Love how succeeding lines in the middle of your poem come like punchlines.

Björn Rudberg said...

Love the reverse of Pygmalion here .. well deserved.

grapeling said...

so you're doing WHAT with that sharp cutting tool?

this is perfect ~

Fireblossom said...

Once he hardens, huh? Yeah, they'll do anything, then!

Rommy said...

This is wickedly funny. I adore that last verse.

Outlawyer said...

Ha. Very clever, MZ. Thanks for the smile. k.

Susie Clevenger said...

Love it!

Jim said...

Just don't try breathing life into him, Mom Zee. He will be much better than 'blowup' man or a scarecrow.
Not quite as good as a 'fairy'. I love the British fairy gardens.
..

Ella said...

I kept seeing the scene in Practical Magic when they try to make a man! Deliciously good

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

*Giggle*. A worthy endeavour, I say!

The Bizza said...

"I am creating
a wholesome man
for my unwholesome Eve."

The ending is honest and breathtaking.

Magaly Guerrero said...

It seems the speaker isn't the first to make this mistake. Brilliant!

blueoran said...

God knows we need changing. Thank Heaven some women know they can't. Leave it to the devil to rejoice in these details. Yes.

Gillena Cox said...

every woman's dream, i think at least once


much love...

Kerry O'Connor said...

And still we try in the hope one day we will get it right.

Susan said...

Your very own Pygmalian in a reversed Galatea! Or a Golem or a Frankenstein--I just hope he leaves when he wears out his welcome!