Tuesday, February 24, 2015

July Remembered

July.

Rain fell
like it hadn't heard there was a drought,
and it was cool enough to put shivers
in the sunset.

Danny James kissed
the birthmark on my thigh
and wished on the whole sky
full of stars.

There were all the usual wars.

July.

For The Tuesday Platform at Real Toads

18 comments:

Suburban Spinach said...

I like the way the title feeds into the first line: July remembered July. Especially since "July" sounds rather like "You lie," and "re-membered" might mean "parts pieced back together." Also, "rain" in an anagram for "I ran." So if your notion to run "fell," then I suppose you stayed and likely got your body touched in ways you didn't intend to and also probably got your heart broken (by his lies).

"Shivers in the sunset" is gorgeous.

"Shivers" also equals "Sh. I vers(e)." This means that the experience was so intense that it led you to write a poem about it. But you want it kept a secret, so you've embedded it in code.

"full of stars" = "fool of star(e)s"

Danny James may also equal two boys, Danny AND James. Or maybe "Danny" is code for "Deny," and you're telling yourself to "Deny James" ... or you're talking to someone else, telling him/her to deny James. Same J. What does J stand for? July? Jewel? Is the jewel the same type of person you are? Are you soul twins?

And like I said before, "war" equals "raw," so what you're really saying is "there were all the usual raws. Which is awfully close to "roars."

And now "July" has turned into "Jewel I" and "Jewel, why?" at the end.

Maybe. ;)

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Carrie Van Horn said...

That was a hot July for sure. Love this Mama Zen. :-)

Jazzbumpa said...

I'm not going to make a feeble attempt at analysis.

I'll just say this does seem to be written in code

I love shivers n the sunset

And I need more spinach in my diet.

Cheers!
JzB

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Beautiful. The one word full circle ending is perfect.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Your juxtaposition here is perfect - the kiss upon the thigh against a backdrop of the usual wars. Remarkable poetry.

Gail said...

Beautiful and it just feels right.

Björn Rudberg said...

To put cool against warmth and love against war.. really vivid.

Fireblossom said...

I love it when you write this stuff. Plus, I love "all the usual wars" and the stand-alone word at the end. I'm not even going to get into the birthmark and wishing on all the stars. *sigh*

rallentanda said...

Fond memories of summer and young love !

Kenn Merchant said...

July is definitely that time of year in which battles are wrought and celebrations just the same.

blueoran said...

An extreme season, at the extreme from this cold one: when it could rain so hard to shiver the swelter. Same fulcrum in that kiss, in the memory of love amid so many wars. Such moments are so worth living and remembering so, here amid so much without--so keep it up, girl.

Susie Clevenger said...

Beautiful...July does birth heat in flesh and sky

Gillena Cox said...

have to remember my July will go through my July poems

much love...

Outlawyer said...

This is wonderful, MZ--maybe a new favorite--July a great month to choose what with the 4th and you certainly have a lot of stars and stripes going on. The end line is especially striking. It actually reads almost like the beginning of a novel. Thanks. k. (Manicddaily)

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

A wonderful collection of memories, close and far, and the way we relate to them.

Justin Lamb said...

I like how there is cold and warmth, love and war. The contrasts make the poem interesting.

grapeling said...

July was pretty damn hot ~