Well, that depends on whether or not you and/or they care, doesn't it?Tightly written, MZ, and packed with emotion.
It's framed like a problem of logic, but it isn't that at all, is it?
Perhaps you will be free?? This is a gem and I like the shape & form too ~
A tight write, asking a soul-stirring question.
sometimes we just have to let people do whatever they're up to so that they feel the consequences... though for those who see further - and for those who love - it's the toughest thing on earth
Another gem indeed!! You are the best, MZ!! Thanks for the start to my day!!
Wow. I love this! :)
This is fantastic! The fourth and fifth lines are heaven to my ears.
What a fascinating form - not one I've ever tried, so you've inspired me.
MZ-- I thought I commented, but having trouble with it taking! This is certainly half a quarrel--the petrification wonderful (meaning wonderfully written); and great voice. k.
First of course.. half a quarrel.. it makes so much sense.. There would never be a possibility to respond to this, would it?.. and the references to sarcophagi made it even better.
What a great name for this poetry form - half a quarrel! Let your sensible sediment... that's such a great line!
Indeed, then what?? I like the questioning ending.
Very imaginative take on Brian's prompt; half a quarrel indeed; think we did one of these at some point at dVerse; kind of the tough lady blues here, MZ; very cool.
Love how you ended this with a hanging question. To have written the response would have taken a lot away from your poem, but as it is, there is so much room for the imagination to run. Nicely done!
Wow, this was a really well written poem so full of emotion. I like how the form of this poem creates a spade, as in the suit of card. It could also look like a tree I suppose. I really like the line, "let 'no' become stone on your lips," because I feel lit conveys most of the emotional tension in this. I also can relate with it because there are times where I'd rather someone say no than toy around.
I just love the line, "let "no" become stone on your lips"Cool shape and content, Mama Z.
love the double plays on some words...like lie up front.....the stone no on the lips...well played mz
I get an underlying feeling of defiance, which I like.
I love the form, and the spade really digs.
Sorry I'm just now getting here. How way cool to use the quarrel and "break" it! I liked this a lot. Death is only about the "one". Thank you!
Lover, quarrel or not. The question is disturbance enough.
Oh wow, what a good break. I like how only using one half of the quarrel seems to make this feel sadder to me. It's as if silence was the frustratingly predictable response from someone who has stopped trying. I really like this poem.
love, love, love this!♥
calling a spade, a spade (in shape, at least) ~
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