Friday, January 16, 2015

Edit

I tell my story
so I can edit.

I edit to be
less tragically flawed.

for MTB at dVerse

27 comments:

Brian Miller said...

if only it were that easy, you know...ha...

it is good to tell our story though...so that others may edit...

and perhaps through that, I save them from similar.

Claudia said...

very cool... as long as we can edit there's still hope...my life's an endless line of edits...smiles

Fireblossom said...

This is cool.

(love the third line).

bwfiction said...

Yes - online we pretend our fiction is our reality.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Yeah, love it. I write to edit. Editing actually is kinda fun once you get the hang of it!

Victoria said...

We are all so flawed and somehow that adds to the beauty of the whole thing--texture, color.

Lolamouse said...

I think we all edit our stories. We just have to remember what our edits were!

Anthony Desmond said...

if only... ugh, our lives are written in stone...

Björn Rudberg said...

Maybe that edit works a little bit on the way.. though I guess edit is more like veneer...

Kenn Merchant said...

Ah yes, editing. I rarely use it. I enjoy the mistakes because they make a poem all that much more interesting. Just like in life we make mistakes and want to fix them, but sometimes it is better to just learn from the mistake and not do it again.

Glenn Buttkus said...

Speaking of editing, you have given us both eight Word, & seven Word forms; which is cool, but it's like have already cut the excess from 10, making me think the third stanza would have been six Word; might have been fun to work stanza down to one word.

Kathy Reed said...

I like Glenn's suggestion..

lindakruschke said...

I spent much of 2014 editing poems for my poetry book. Definitely different than writing. Worthwhile, though. Peace, Linda

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Witty and profound at the same time.

Gabriella said...

I am not sure my editing makes my flaws less so sadly. Interesting ten-word!

Mary said...

Isn't that the truth!

whenspaceissilence said...

I guess it happens even when we tell our own story to ourselves. The first draft gets fine tuned… We sound clearer on the second try.

Ginny Brannan said...

Ah, but our true story truly lies in the flaws, does it not? Perfection is over-rated! Nice little "thinking" piece.

Gail said...

You have so much power showing in few words. I like your style.

Sioux said...

The way I write, I get lots of chances to edit.

Enigma said...

We are what we are, tragically flawed or otherwise. Beautifully penned!

ds said...

Ha ha! Love this.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

No one can strip a poem to its essence as skilfully and powerfully as you. This one zings, MZ.

Outlawyer said...

Super clever, MZ. Agree with Bri--if only-- one can make the story funny at least, rather than so tragic! Thanks much. k. (http://manicddaily.wordpress.com)

The Bizza said...

I think you successfully described my existence as well! Loved this.

kaykuala said...

Logical progression it is MZ! Effectively stated!

Hank

my heart's love songs said...

this is stunning, MZ! i love all of your poetry, but your short verse is often the most powerful i've ever read.