Saturday, November 1, 2014

Control

I am in control.
You're a shadow hanging back
and recording your observations
of the sugar in my sap.
Measuring the heat
held deep in my ceramic bones.
Watching clouds creep clockwise
to make my stormy mouth their home.

You are just a variable.
You're an ex in search of why.
Record your observations.
Hypothesize.

A Flash Fiction 55 for Real Toads

16 comments:

Sylvia K said...

Oh, yes!! Another good one that says it all without filling an entire page! I love it!! Hope your weekend is going well, MZ!

Gia said...

Phenomenal. Especially the part about the clouds.

Susan said...

Hmm. What is control, anyway? I'm sure it's not in our record keeping and calibrations. This reads like a riddle (what has creramic bones). But it makes me think of the live things and forces we measure and how they must laugh.

Fireblossom said...

I absolutely love the wordplay here. I read it three times just because.

Kathryn Dyche Dechairo said...

Dang, you just keep on rocking. Love it.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Hi Mama Zen! Thanks for hosting a Flash 55.

Yours is wonderful, tightly controlled, and I love the last four lines, how you used ex rather than X.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Ah, excellent! I love your word combinations and unique images:

the sugar in my sap
ceramic bones
my stormy mouth

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Other Mary said...

Oh Mama Z. this is soooo good!

Marian said...

you're an ex in search of why?!?!?!?!
PERFECT.

R.K. Garon said...

Alot of cliches so unlike you. But, I always enjoy your site.
ZQ

Sherry Blue Sky said...

WOW! I read it more than once too, in order to take it all in. Spectacular.

grapeling said...

love this, MZ ~

Hannah said...

So clever the "ex in search of why," x and y not lost on me ;) love that!

Grace said...

Strong voice MZ ~ Love it ~

Margaret said...

a mysterious 55 - I can read this several ways as I'm not sure what you mean exactly - but that isn't what reading poetry is always about. This can speak to many people in different ways. Nice.