Yes. And I love it--how we live, like with my "list" poem. I also picked Borges this round.
smiles..yeah i think it does...and made me think as well about what we often cannot see that tells the real story...hey i will take a riot.
Oh, yes!! I love it, too! How we live indeed! Great one as always, MZ! Have a great weekend!
Wow! I think it has worked out extremely well. i love the idea of lines being hidden between the folds, and the contrast is amazing.
Wow MZ~ what a beauty this was... i was astounded by the hidden meanings in the folds... how a bright positive poem turns dark with a few hidden unread lines!! amazing! :)
This is really cool. I especially like the last two lines.
I like this a lot.. how all the hidden one creates the shadows out of bliss.. most like we are doing all the time -- hiding the dark realities..
This is a great style. It has a "the brighter the light, the deeper it's shadow" vibe to it.
Brilliant MZ...I love how much thought you put into this, the idea of the hidden lines becoming unveiled in the unfolding...excellent.
So very clever AND that it speaks of current events - and really lines up so much more with Borges's style of writing than what I did… I just posted mine because I spent an hour on it… ;P
yes, brilliant ~
Yes, it certainly does MZ! Done very well!Hank
It works.And what a contrast in meaning. It makes me think how different are the words we sometimes say vs. the ones we think.
I think it comes across just fine. Heat and riots just go together, yanno?
what a beautiful day for a riot. Do The Right Thing, hottest day of the year.
I agree...it worked. And loved the contrast between the first group of lines and then the "unfolded" ones. That last line was a riot in itself! Pow!
Yes, so imaginative..There is so much between what seems evident and the truth between the lines
Well! Wasn't that interesting. I did enjoy what you did with this.ZQ
Yes--it's rather like the underside--well done. k.
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