Too bad. I can feel the possibilities evaporating.
Smiling and the visual.
Oh, yes! You do have me smiling this morning, MZ!!
I love the title. I love the lines: and the wet cotton cling to your everythingdrove me mindless madWish I'd written this.
The surprise in that last line caught me off-guard in a good way...
oooh i think this is my new favorite of yours, MZ. just perfect and sighful.
Too bad about that old sun! Loved this.
your hair smelled sweet as sonnets,That is a perfectly lovely line.
Now how did you make this so charming AND rhyme it so imaginatively?
I love the smell of a wet puppy dog. I have since my first whiff. The wet cottons are overpowering, I would forget even the smells. Sun, Sun, go away. Little Johnny wants to play. ..
I too wish I had written this! Bravo, Mama Zen!
"and the wet cotton cling to your everything" is a gem. (The rest ain't sucky, either ;)
Oh, I forgot to mention the internal rhyme. Lovely.
Simply beautiful! :D
ha. def playful & sexy.not too often we wish the sun away,but def could see it there...smiles.
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