Friday, May 2, 2014

The Door

"I get so scared sometimes;
I just want to see your faces,"

she said, and I was surprised.
I hadn't realized before

that there's goodbye
on both sides of the door.

For Kerry's prompt at Real Toads

17 comments:

Sylvia K said...

Ah, I do like this one, MZ!! Of course, I always like yours!! Enjoy your weekend!!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Excellent! Your brevity here makes the vignette idea pop! There is just enough story to attach emotion to, before the fade away.

Kathryn said...

Your verse always packs such a punch, you're such an inspiration. Love that last stanza.

Susan said...

O! Thank you for "... goodbye
on both sides of the door.'

I wish I had written this! I'm posting it, keeping it.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh my goodness - I, too, never would have realized that until I read these words. Profound lines!

Herotomost said...

Queen of brevity and cudgels...lol. Yeah that was tasty and tiny, just the way I like it. Great job.

Fireblossom said...

This is you doing what you do better than anyone. I think this is excellent.

Marion said...

...also, hello. Beautiful. xo

Helen said...

Wise woman ... such a wise woman.

grapeling said...

damn. ~

Sioux said...

I'm with Edwin Starr.

"Good God y'all."

(It's better than "Damn.")

ccchampagne said...

Wow! Just... Wow!

Kim Nelson said...

Realization and the resulting empathy are profoundly felt in this brief, powerful piece.

Marian said...

oh yes, there certainly is a good-bye in both directions. very nice snapshot, MZ.

Grandmother (Mary) said...

Yes, of course, both sides...

Susie Clevenger said...

Oh, yes there is...Again, a wealth of meaning in a few well chosen words

Lorraine Renaud said...

i guess sometimes love is stronger in saying goodbye...very clever Mama Zen