Wednesday, May 14, 2014

Pheasant Hunting With Daddy: A Confession

When I threw up cold coffee and milk
all over that Kansas cornfield
and had to strip down to my little girl long johns
and wait in the cab of the truck,
I whined, but inwardly blessed the good luck
that saved me from shoot or disappoint him.

For Words Count at Real Toads

22 comments:

Susan said...

Good choice! How to say no without saying no. Yes!

Sylvia K said...

Love it!!! Some of us started trying to please men at an early age, didn't we!!!!

Kerry O'Connor said...

I'd have done more than throw up if my father had taken me hunting.

Hannah said...

You continually amaze me with your ability to bring such vivid scenes to life in so few words. You inspire me!

Debi Swim said...

I can feel your relief, wonderful story telling here.

Helen said...

Love 'little girl long johns' .... Even as an older girl, I would have a hard time witnessing a kill.

Fireblossom said...

Whatever it takes, girl. I could never understand hunting, though I did like the venison my friend's father served up.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

You say so much in so few words. I always feel like I saw a movie when I read you.

Magaly Guerrero said...

Such a visual.

Isn't nice to look back and be grateful for something we thought was completely horrid when it happened?

C.C. said...

I love this. You have incorporated so much imagery in so few lines.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love it. Reminds me of when my dad took me fishing in the little putt-putt out in the Big Waves, because he didnt have a son, and I threw up and we had to go home.

Susie Clevenger said...

I threw up about everything when I was a child...At least I was consistent. :)

grapeling said...

vivid, MZ, and potent ~

blueoran said...

Saved by the upchuck! I'd say your gorge did for you what you couldn't do for yourself. And for Daddy, too.

Lorraine Renaud said...

Smart and quick thinking for such a little girl, bravo you rock Mama Zen

manicddaily said...

You squeeze in a huge amount here, MZ, very vividly and with the rush of the single sentence. Well done. (I'm a vegetarian but am not actually so against hunting, which seems to me so much more humane than most meat garnered from farm animals!s. But I can see others feel differently.) k.

ccchampagne said...

This is really well done! Nostalgia, taking a stand, being brave... I don't know, just everything in such a short piece! I love it!

Other Mary said...

Oh, what a situation to be in. I think you came up with an excellent strategy!

Poet Laundry said...

aww! I love how you craft a poem with a few perfectly chosen words and end up with something so vivid and complete.

Lolamouse said...

Throwing up was definitely the best option!

razzamadazzle said...

Oh yeah. That was definitely the best way to go.

Ella said...

I am glad you tossed your emotions-so you didn't have to witness or participate in this game!