Saturday, April 5, 2014

Discovered

Discovered God in the mirror.
Discovered I liked it.

Discovered the world in my pores.
Discovered fault lines in my face.

Discovered the beast is a blade.
Discovered the beauty of bone.

Discovered the beginning is silence.
Discovered the end is a scream out of reach.

For Grace's mirror prompt at Real Toads

17 comments:

Grace said...

Discovered that every line drawn
is terrific ~

Thanks for linking up MZ & wishing you happy weekend ~

gillena cox said...

a wonderful uplifting celebration of self

much love...

Charleen said...

The world in your face...powerful metaphor.

Sumana Roy said...

love the contrasts, a pure mirror
quality...

Kerry O'Connor said...

This builds line by line to the frightening climax.
Awesome piece.

Björn said...

Each pair of line with contrasts.. escalating to the that chilling end.. or maybe as long as the shriek is out of reach we are not at the end yet....

Susie Clevenger said...

With each line a contrast in the reflection...the end is scary but one we all face

Siggi in Downeast Maine said...

Mesmerizing poem..
enjoyed every word and line...
Peace
Siggi

Kenia Cris said...

All I can say, if I hadn't said it before a million times, is: I wish I had written this.

Beautiful.

<3

Ella said...

Discovered I can see you more clearly! Wonderfully done

Sioux said...

You can do incredible things with just 8 lines...

Hannah said...

Powerful work here Mama Zen...you always astound me with your depth in brevity. So much here....sigh.

manicddaily said...

Quite terrifying but terrific. It feels like someone getting over self- cutting-- not so easy I think--or maybe they don't get over it, but I felt that the "out of reachness" of the scream might actually be powerful here. K.

Fireblossom said...

This feels like a progression, to me; from self admiration to self-negation. It's hard to read because letting the devils out by blood and primal scream is intense and scary stuff.

Lorraine Renaud said...

I have survived because of the silence now...I am shouting so loud, \I hope to explode

Margaret said...

From soothing to … I suppose as we age there is less to like, yet - I find I'm not as judgmental as I used to be. Wow - leaves me chilled - …trying to ponder a scream out of reach. It feels a bit like drowning to me (if that makes any sense)

grapeling said...

rather chilling closure ~