Saturday, March 22, 2014

Chalked

We chalked each other
on the linoleum floor -
just a joke -
but I know symbols when I see them.
I was dead to you
and you were dying for me
to break us quick and clean;
it was time to go.

My voice is a shell
in a mason jar;
all packed up
like a souvenir of the summer.
Silence is the finest lie I can tell,
and lying's the only language that you know.

For Margaret's prompt at Real Toads (I screwed up and used the word list).

12 comments:

Sam Edge said...

This is the perfect break up song - very Alanis Morissete

Björn said...

Silence can be the worst... in all other cases there is hope...

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Definitely an ominous sign.

Hannah said...

Strong imagery and love the symbolism...nicely done, MZ!!

Susan said...

Such hard luck to be put away before he is ready! At least the lying and silence support each other. Fine poem.

Kerry O'Connor said...

The first four lines of stanza 2 contain the most brilliant of metaphors to suggest the complete withdrawal of one from another. Excellent poem.

btw we removed the word list because it was part of last month's Play It Again, but the nature of the challenge allows you to choose any prompt you may like to do again - so there has been no screw up at all.

Fireblossom said...

I think you rocked this.

Kathryn said...

This gave me goose bumps, fantastic write.

Kenia Cris said...

Ouch, brilliant writing, great ending line!

Margaret said...

and this ingenious poem came from a word list? Love everything about it.

Kay L. Davies said...

Wow, you didn't screw up. Didn't Margaret say she put the word list in, then changed her mind? And now I agree with her...ingenious, indeed.
You rock, MZ.
K

Susie Clevenger said...

I agree with Sam...perfect breakup song with plenty of bite