Friday, February 28, 2014

The Woman At The Well



He saw six men in my eyes.
Yes, I had lain and loved.
Perhaps that's why I wasn't the kind
to deny a dusty tongue
a share of the sweetness sung
from the bottom of the well.
And, he could tell.  

He spoke of quenching thirst.
He never mentioned shame or sin
or treated as a curse
the tender heart that I'd held open
for so many - now, including him -
willingly.
Love or living water; I was practiced at belief.

A work in progress for Fireblossom Friday at Real Toads.

20 comments:

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Breathtaking.

If more shared the gospel this way, then His will would be done on Earth as it is in Heaven.

Exquisite, loved it and love you,
Mosk

Kim Nelson said...

So good! You shine a new light on a woman of a certain ilk, and it chases away judgement and disregard. Love it.

Susan said...

You made the form flow with the story, the inner life of the women at the well. Her testimony should be gospel all on its own. Bless you!

Fireblossom said...

Perfect poem to go with this art, MZ. I love hearing this story from her point of view.

humbird said...

'Love or living water' ~ sounds as truth from the woman by the well ~ thrilling story...

hedgewitch said...

A bit of the Magdalene in us all--I love the way you've managed to get the narrative meshed with the bright bits of language into a very ancient, ever-new tale.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love the lack of judgment and that he appreciated her open heart which now included him. Reminds me of a lovely friend who says he "tips a glass of wine" to the men of his woman's past, because they helped to make her who she is....cool, MZ.

ayala said...

wow...great!

Helen said...

Stunning! We would be a more content society with this philosophy ... (with age/experience comes great wisdom.)

Sumana Roy said...

Her strength could be felt in the lines....

grapeling said...

It's hard to believe this is only 55 words. So much depth ~

Kerry O'Connor said...

I think you have captured the essence of this woman perfectly.

Sioux said...

"Perhaps that's why I wasn't the kind to deny a dusty tongue
a share of the sweetness sung
from the bottom of the well.
And, he could tell."

This is gorgeous. A WIP? What's still to work on? Jeeze.

Kathryn said...

Wow, I love this. The dusty tongue, the sweetness at the bottom of the well. Great write.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

I too love this--especially the close--

Lorraine Renaud said...

oh and wow 100% with her, super write only you...mama Zen

C.C. said...

This is so exquisitely written. Love it.

manicddaily said...

Really a story, or the beginning of one--thanks. k.

razzamadazzle said...

This is absolutely wonderful!

PALLAVION said...

Beautiful!!