Wednesday, February 19, 2014

Obsolete

Put on
your favorite brand of birdsong.

Meet me
between the cardboard sheets.

I have
two hours worth of stardust.

Make a wish
before I'm obsolete.

You keep me
contained in your collection.

Fragile
as the future and out of reach.

Sacred as the stones
you've styled contentment.

Foreign, flesh and blood,
and obsolete.

For Kenia's Get Listed prompt at Real Toads

16 comments:

Kathryn said...

I love where your words take us.

hedgewitch said...

There's something very taking about these couplets, each building from the former, even though the message may be ambivalent, it still seems worth deciphering the runes on the stones, because so much is lost in translation. Excellent and moody piece, MZ.

Sylvia K said...

Yes, you've done it again, MZ!! Love it!!!

Ella said...

Cheers Mama Zen! Your words dance off the page~ Bravo

Sam Edge Author said...

make a wish before I'm obsolete - yes yes yes!

Fireblossom said...

Sounds like being valued without being seen.

Kenia Cris said...

Love it love it love it!!! The form and sounds and the message delivered!

Thank you muchly for answering the prompt. <3

Kisses!

Helen said...

Wonderful! 'Fragile as the future and out of reach' .. I love this line!

Susie Clevenger said...

"Make a wish before I am obsolete" Love that...beautiful work as always

Susan said...

A new thing for me, the wish that must be made before the last line! "Fragile as the future and out of reach"--unlike, say, Tinkerbell, who we always saved by desperate applause. "Obsolete" is fantastic!

gabrielle said...

Someone's picture perfect fantasy of intimacy. Even when kept under glass, it is perishable.

humbird said...

The intention - enough! Perfect!

grapeling said...

ack. mine is about 27 times as long and says about 1/5. ~

Margaret said...

The first line I adore. How much fun you had with this list!

razzamadazzle said...

What a wonderful poem you've created from the list. I love your use of couplets in this.

Lorraine Renaud said...

lately, that's my middle name, love this one MZ