Sunday, February 16, 2014

It Was A Woman

It was a woman who first walked
across the surface of the moon.
She stepped in drill bit stilettos
and struck  green cheese lava fondue.

Not her thing, but her kids think it's cool.
It was a woman who first walked
along the bottom of the sea.
She drifted down through the water

in an ovum shaped submarine.
Found dirty dishes in the sink.
It was a woman who first walked
the weeds beyond the garden path

just to see what God was hiding
behind the curtain in the back.
And when apples tasted of facts,
it was a woman who first walked.

A quatern for Kerry's challenge at Real Toads.  Also submitted to Poetry Pantry.

24 comments:

Gail said...

I love it.

Powerful.

Gail said...
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Kerry O'Connor said...

Oh, indeed! I love the way you peel back our progress from the moon to the garden - and anthropologists would certainly agree with your repeated line.

Love this:
It was a woman who first walked
the weeds beyond the garden path

just to see what God was hiding
behind the curtain in the back.

Björn said...

Oh Green cheese fondue... Not sure it makes me too hungry though.. so many fun and brilliant lines here...still at the end, it's back to Eve and the apple... and that devious God... and I guess poor Adam never understood anything.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Your use of form is so graceful here MZ--loved this

Sylvia K said...

Ah, a woman without a doubt, MZ!!

Fireblossom said...

Oh hell yes. I love the drill bit stilettos and the whole clever, biting commentary of it all.

Laura said...

and don't we always seem to be the ones who notice those dirty dishes in the sink… and wash and put them away!

Mary said...

No doubt....just leave it to the women!!

hedgewitch said...

The eternal feminine almost always has to walk--and what she finds seems to be work and mess of every description. But hey, that's what stilettos are for--though I prefer a good moccasin myself. This sings like those high dolphin/whale songs, out of the range of most ears.

Susan said...

It was a woman, I agree. The womb the dishes, the kids. Except for the walk, it was a clever set up.

grapeling said...

brilliant ~

Sioux said...

Mama Zen--We should chuck all those history books chock full of nothing but white men and you could rewrite them...

Brilliant and full of whimsy and biting.

Kathryn said...

Love it, especially those drill bit stilletos.

Kim Nelson said...

Well of course it was! :-)
The form serves you well.

Robert Bourne said...

enjoyed this... a little whimsy with more than a grain of truth...

aspiritofsimplicity said...

loved this one....never did understand why it ended up all our fault...Adam ate the damn thing too didn't he?

Jim said...

Genesis, Queen Mom Z version.
I love your lady's firsts.

Yes, and leave it to a woman to complain about those "dirty dishes in the sink."
..

madhumakhi said...

Your poem is a brilliant flight of imagination.

Marian said...

man, the apples around here NEVER taste of facts. NEVER.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love the wry with with which you view life, Kelli.......I always enjoy your poems so much! LOVE the stilettos on the moon.

Sumana Roy said...

Love the U-turn..from moon to apple...brilliant!!

Margaret said...

I read this the other day and I still have the same response "So COOL!"

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