Monday, January 6, 2014

Monstered

Bread baked on a blooded stone
leaves you hungry and hollow.
Milk molested from the breast
cannot silk your sleep.
Red-rimmed eyes testify
the purse is insomnia's pillow.
You're monstered by the mismatch
between your wants and needs.

For Open Link Monday at Real Toads

25 comments:

Gail said...

True and well said.

Sioux said...

"silk your sleep...the purse is insomnia's pillow..monstered by the mismatch between your wants and your needs."

Brilliant. And so true.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Such an excellent choice of words create immense impact in your 8 lines. I think of King Lear's cry:
"Reason not the need!"

hedgewitch said...

Everything in this is precise and explicit, yet retains the phosphorescent glow of mental/linguistic extras that somehow generate real poetry. Without that, phrases like "the purse is insomnia's pillow.." (!) would be merely aphorisms, if excellent ones--with it, they induce a mood, a cascading of reaction, that only poetry can instigate. Really excellent work here, MZ.

Susan said...

This poem is stretching me ... making me see the stretches in me ... monstered with polar wants and needs and also by thoughtless substitutions. Gosh, I need more affirmative action in my life!

LaTonya Baldwin said...

Love your verb!

Fireblossom said...

You have a knack for turning language to your poetic sense, and you've provided a perfect example here. The title and each line are carefully chosen and strong.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Whoa, you know how to tell it like it is so succinctly. Fantastic, MZ.

Laura said...

"cannot silk your sleep."… I love this expression!

Gemma Wiseman said...

Dynamic threads of alliteration add so many musical tones to this piece. The "b" sound in the first line is quite bombastic.

Susie Clevenger said...

The end of this is a killer...it is true for so many of us.

Grace said...

I thought the ending lines are really strong ~ Good one MZ ~

Hannah said...

Wow...this is raw. Bottom-line really brings this together.

kaykuala said...

You're monstered by the mismatch
between your wants and needs.

It's good that one's wants are limited by scarcity! Needs, certainly is a restraining factor. Nicely MZ!!

Hank

my heart's love songs said...

LOVE your writing!

blueoran said...

Maybe we should make this our new national anthem.

Liz Rice-Sosne said...

These are exceptionally clever words. They make one (me) do a double take, come back and read again. A real pleasure.

ed pilolla said...

monstered and hungry for more is what i am...

Marian said...

this one kinda grosses me out, MZ. i think it's that breast line, ouch! monstrous.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

MamaZen - For me, the best writing always elicits two reactions: inspiration and envy, both owing, in this case, to your prodigious talent.

I hate you/love you :) Moskowitz

Kim Nelson said...

You speak, with great precision, to both the personal and societal. Tight, direct and specific diction raise this to the exceptional.

Margaret said...

I think I will never stop learning from you and being amazed by you. Your mind is so creative - always leaves me in awe.

Outlawyer said...

Wonderful. K.

Kay L. Davies said...

Wants and needs, ever mismatched, have never been so perfectly described. Yours is an awesome talent, Ms Z.
K

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Brilliant!
Anna :o]