Sunday, December 15, 2013

Midway

Midway down the midway,
between the barkers and the dogs,
we found a place
a bit less light than shadow.
And, we kissed
as if we didn't know tomorrow

would bring the ferris wheel down.

For Poets United.

14 comments:

hedgewitch said...

The brevity here underlines your choice of imagery, the whole package of emotions, present and future, compressed into the most effective space. It made me instantly think of the Joni Mitchell song with the same line, and all the grief of understanding in that, as well.

Sylvia K said...

A very moving piece, MZ.

Brian Miller said...

ha. that last line changes everything...makes me think of the days of innocence and our first forays beyond it...and how much that will shake things up

Fireblossom said...

This is an example of something you do so well and i enjoy so much; in just a few well-chosen lines, you put the reader into a snapshot from a life, and the emotion of the piece just flows through naturally. I love this, especially the opening line and the kiss.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Always lovely to see you in the Pantry, MZ. As Shay says, you do this brilliantly: the snapshot of a moment out of time.......I, too, love the opening line.

Robert Bourne said...

the first lines take you to a place.. and then the last lines halt you in step...nicely done

Mary said...

An amazing poem, MZ. That ferris wheel seems to put the kibosh on budding romance.

Susan said...

Oh, tomorrow! The magic was there before the dismantling. I like how you take us there and we know it i only temporary.

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Knew there was a reason I didn't like ferris wheels.

Lorraine said...

oh but the wheels keep on turning sadly...

wkkortas said...

I concur with the wise Fireblossom; it's a snapshot, but a wonderfully composed and colorful one--brevity is not your enemy, for sure.

Robyn Greenhouse said...

but until the ferris wheel comes down, there is that kiss!

Robyn Greenhouse said...

but until the ferris wheel comes down, there is that kiss!

scotthastiepoet said...

Terrifically written, felt and realised - technically the structure of this is pretty perfect - Loved it! With Best wishes scott www.scotthastie.com