Tuesday, December 3, 2013

Clawfoot Tub

Fill that clawfoot tub
until the pipes complain.
Throw in the Mr. Bubbles.
I'll throw on some old Coltrane.

We'll let the water raft our fingers
and our currents take our toes -
till silly takes our good sense
and we overflow

that beat up clawfoot tub
with the pipes that always complain,
and everything that isn't us
goes swirling down the drain.

For Open Link Night at dVerse

45 comments:

Björn said...

A hot bath in a clawfoot tub.. bubbles and jazz.. what a wonderful way to spend a night.

Brian Miller said...

oo la...a little coltrane and a shared bath...that sounds like an amazing thing...i wish we had a bigger tub, just saying...and like the casting off and letting of some things go down the drain...

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Home run verse! Excellent details, especially the clever ending. I covet your skills, lady.

Helen said...

Great "How To" primer for the lonely hearts club .... :-)

Fireblossom said...

This hits all the senses, except maybe taste. Maybe not! It has the sexiness of a shared bath, and the cute fun of the final rhyme. I like it!

Sylvia K said...

Ah, I did SO need a giggle this morning!! Thanks, MZ!!

Anthony Desmond said...

some lovely tunes and a shared bath... what a way to spend an evening.. smiles... great flow as well

Poet Laundry said...

This is cute and sexy! Love that ending too.

Grandmother (Mary) said...

Sounds like a fun way to spend an evening!

grapeling said...

love this - brings big smiles ~

annotating60 said...

Yes, I used to have one of those babies. Wonderful to take a soak in. >KB

Kathryn said...

Love, love, love. Bubble baths are the best.

freyawrites.com said...

Now this reminds me of a particular evening after a too-long journey home in the snow - steam, goosebumps, Radox... mmm, lovely! :) Such a fun poem, thank you!

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Ah--loved this MZ--

M. J. Joachim said...

hahaha - This just makes me smile!

Margaret said...

Mama Zen… you are on FIRE with this one. I am in love with the way your mind thinks.

Glenn Buttkus said...

Sensual, joyful, & humorous, this poem hits those high notes like Coltrane flat out. Sharing a tub never compared to sharing a shower for me, but if the participants were petite enough, interesting things might have developed; thanks for the hoot & hug.

emmett wheatfall said...

Just a mere mention of Coltrane's name, a tub is set ablaze. Lovely my friend.

Eric (Bubba) Alder said...

What, nothing to drink?

quest4peas said...

This is a really fun poem! Love the part about "everything that isn't us
goes swirling down the drain."

Jay Blue said...

Nicely done... beautiful rhythm, nice flow, and the recursive path through the key images is pure!

Wolfsrosebud said...

that would be great if things could go down the drain... seems like you had fun with this

ayala said...

Love this :)

Ronald Shields said...

What memories this brings back, oh how I miss my clawfoot tub. I like the idea of what's not us just going down the drain.

Morgan/Booknvolume.com said...

aaahhhhh love the image here....soothing like a deep bath of memory...Nice ;)

razzamadazzle said...

How fun! You really make me want one of those old tubs!

kaykuala said...

Chuckles! Nice way of having it in the long bath. A luxury many may not have time for these days. Wonderful write MZ!

Hank

Truedessa said...

Oh, I do enjoy a bath in one of
those old clawfoot tubs..fill it
with lavender bubbles and relax..
Thanks for the smile..

kkkkaty said...

I might pick a different soul song, a different bubble bath but definitely love the idea of sinking myself in a deep clawfoot tub knowing I'll come out rejuvenated and or ready for a good night's sleep...awesome for such a short and simple poem!

vivchook said...

Wonderful to see that while the bubbles cleanse the outside, the jazz cleanses the soul, & all the stuff that doesn't need to stay with us goes down the drain at the end. Your imagery of the sensations of water through the fingers and toes is exquisite. A beautiful poem - thank you.

billgncs said...

Oh hot water's such a happy thing!

This was a fun read

Maggie Grace said...

What fun! Have done this :) Made me smile. Hubby and I don't live in the house with the clawfoot tub any longer.

Mary said...

I love the mood you have created in this poem!

Kate Mia said...

Well it seems many people enjoy a bubble bath ..but unfortunately not me..with tactile sensitivity..that cannot take the chlorine soaking of tap water well..
even with bubbles and all of that..

But it certainly looks pleasurable..without the soaking skin..and pruned fingers..that always makes my skin crawl..no matter what beauty could be with me in the tub....

Well..that was hard to explain at times in the past..and yah..my wife still can't understand it Still..as only aliens..don't like soaking bodies..in bubble baths...it seems...

So yah..every time think of any tub i think of that..but sometimes unusual memories inspired as such can be interesting to share as well..if only imagining a tub...

Mary said...

So much joy and playfulness....oh, what I'd give for a clawfoot tub!
CheersS!

rumoursofrhyme said...

Playful, suggestive, practical too (!), with great rhythm and natural rhymes; what's not to like about this ... smiles

Tony

blueoran said...

Great little love song, a water balm for dirtied feet. A bathroom renovation evicted our claw-foot tub years ago. How I miss Billy Holiday and hot scented bathwater and how our languid voices boomed in that little room. - Brendan

SaraV said...

I love me some hot water, bubbles, and Coltrane, while what's not me goes down the drain--big smiles MZ :-)

Lorraine said...

You had me at clawful tub...love it

Susan said...

I had one once--high sided and wide, with the knocking pipes and all. I like "water raft out fingers and our currents take our toes" and everything else. That is cleanliness indeed.

Anonymous said...

ah thats wonderful feeling....lovely...
Sreeja
writingonjusttowrite.blogspot.com

gila_mon said...

Wow, what a solid read. "until the pipes complain." Perfect.

Pealogic said...

Extremely jolly verse.

Sioux said...

"...raft our fingers."

HITF do you do it?

raivenne.com said...

Oh man, a hot bath and cool jazz, letting everything else in the world drain away. It really does not get much better.