Tuesday, November 12, 2013

Buckle

Keep the drill and dignity of your years,
but allow me this flawed instant -
humming with its hollow gain and grace.
Let me navigate

by stars and stride
and a vision of your face.
And, if I miss that place
that buckles your knees,

let me try again.

A Sunday Whirl wordle for Open Link Night at dVerse

30 comments:

annotating60 said...

Well said will humility and sense of purpose. >KB

ayala said...

You are one of a kind! Love this.

grapeling said...

gorgeous ~

Björn said...

That second stanza make my knees buckle..

Timoteo said...

Always welcome to try again...heh heh.

poemblaze said...

I love the sound of this. Beautiful rhythm and consonance.

Kate Mia said...

Well...this reminds me that we must allow each other a little distance in the rope that connects us to be different..and to be connected too...and the weaknesses are part of what It ALL worthwhile..

i think...

darkangelwrites said...

Oh I love this and the goal. "Knee Buckler"

Susan said...

Allow you? Please!

adamsmurphy said...

Such a humility!! It should give a trial!!!

Buddah Moskowitz said...
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Buddah Moskowitz said...

So well done, you are one my favorites, big reason: you don't waste my time. Bigger reason: talent as big as a forest.

Brian Miller said...

smiles....very nice...tight little verse...the second stanza, made me smile

Ginny Brannan said...

Sweet! Love the feel of this, left me wanting to read more!

blueoran said...

I knew you would go for the buckle.

Fireblossom said...

I love it. (And you did a fine job of incorporating the words.)

Katie said...

This is great. The last two lines are perfect! :-)

kaykuala said...

Short and sweet for a Sunday whirl. A great verse MZ!

Hank

oldegg said...

This piece reads so well and has such a determined conclusion.

Lorraine said...

i know nothing of Sunday Whirl I just know that you are an original and wow you are amazing

Wolfsrosebud said...

Stars and hope... what more can one ask for.

emmett wheatfall said...

So lovely. What a warm tale you weave with this piece. Always a joy and one of my favorites are you Mama Zen.

Grandmother (Mary) said...

My stunning introduction to Sunday Swirl. Thanks.

rowantaw.com said...

Your choice of words is so congruent with your intent - they'll buckle alright.

Claudia said...

navigate by stars and stride...not a bad way you know...and always good to give second chances..smiles

Zouxzoux said...

A nice, tight write!

Sioux said...

Mama Zen--Those last three lines are the crowning glory of this piece.

Beautiful.

Robyn Greenhouse said...

This was great!Somehow I think there would be another chance!

my heart's love songs said...

ah, yes... the opportunity to try again is a wonderful gift!

Mystic_Mom said...

Wonderfully done!