Wednesday, September 18, 2013

Wrath Of A Minor God

River, run a little deeper.
River, run a little faster.
River, take the teeth I give you
and chew the bank to bones.

River, eat the sand that's offered.
River, sip the sorrow proffered.
Then River, by my will and water,
let the faithless sink like stones.

For some reason, I've always found the entire concept of minor gods hilarious.  How can a god be minor?  Anyway, the Celts had a plethora of local gods (god of this lake, god of that tree, etc.).  This is written from the point of view of a minor river god with a major attitude.  And, it's for Kerry's challenge at Real Toads.

23 comments:

Fireblossom said...

That's right! (and consult a physician if you experience a deification lasting more than four hours...)

Sam Edge said...

this is "personification" at it's best MZ

Kerry O'Connor said...

The best part of your poem for me is the way you turn everything on its head in the 4th lines of your stanzas. The repetition adds to the overall effect of forward motion, so well-suited to your river god.

hedgewitch said...

I tend to side with those who see a small god in everything, instead of one galumphing giant too big to notice one lost blue world--your river deity is alive and twisting, life-giving and taking as every god and every river is. Excellent use of naming and repeating, here, too

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love your river god!!

chamomile sea said...

Wow. I can't pick a favorite; it's all so powerful, especially the ending.

Sylvia K said...

I love it -- and I love the river and the way you see everything and can express it all!

Gail said...

Awwwwwww, you know river well.

Lorraine said...

There is nothing about water that I don't love, this included
ps I've decided to keep only one blog although i will incorporate all the other blogs genre unto one:
http://photosandstuffl.blogspot.ca/

LaTonya Baldwin said...

Last week I learned new meanings for apostrophe: talking to a person or thing that can't respond. Well done here.

razzamadazzle said...

Love it! It does seem a bit of an oxymoron when you state the obvious. Maybe the major gods are just so busy they have to delegate authority...

Susan said...

An Invocation! Feels efficacious. Ouch. Beautiful.

grapeling said...

a wee poem for a wee god
godling?
godlet?

and Shay, you're hilarious.

Manicddaily said...

I think no one- least of all someone dubious--would want to mess with this God. Your notes are so humorous--they should almost be part of the piece. K.

Mary said...

This god sounds pretty powerful to me. Inspires fear in ME. Smiles.

Actually it seems to me that a lot of 'minor gods' in life have an exaggerated sense of their own importance. LOL.

Debi Swim said...

I thought I'd already posted... umm, that brain thing I guess.

Maybe the minor gods were like minor superheroes... Robin to Batman. ; )

I do love the repetition here. Very effective.

Hannah said...

Nicely done, Mama Zen!!

Your last three lines pack a punch...as always you offer perfect closings. :)!

Brian Miller said...

nice...lyrical and haunting
def the last couple lines...the repetition sets it up nicely though...

Lolamouse said...

The god may be minor, but this poem is a major win! Love it!

Susie Clevenger said...

Nothing like a pissed minor god to distribute wrath...love it!!

Ella said...

I too love how you zing us at the end!

Vanessa V Kilmer said...

I like seeing gods everywhere. And you're right, they have major Napoleon complexes.

Margaret said...

major, minor... still more powerful than humans and nothing to be trifled with... obviously! Well done!