Monday, September 16, 2013

Six Of Seven

Six of seven sunshines
blind me.
Six of seven midnights
find me
moonless;
tuneless;
but crooning to you anyway

for if the sixth of seven notes
should carry
on wary winds
round the very curve of the earth

it would make it worth

the noise I make.

For Open Link Monday at Real Toads

17 comments:

Sylvia K said...

And one more to add to my list of favorites! Love it!!

Susan said...

I think so, too, if just one in seven could play that tune ... it would be alright.

Vanessa V Kilmer said...

Wonderful flow to this. Breathy.

Debi Swim said...

Not sure I understand it but it is a dreamy read - carry wary winds and all those esses. WOW

Kerry O'Connor said...

I do enjoy poetry which incorporates numbering and this one has a very cool sense of progression.

razzamadazzle said...

Beautiful!

cosmos cami said...

This is my favorite sequence:

for if the sixth of seven notes
should carry
on wary winds
round the very curve of the earth

Great share!

chamomile sea said...

I totally dig this, especially the opening and the closing.

Timoteo said...

Strikes me as though you may be pining for the weekend, but I've never seen it done quite as poignantly.

Fireblossom said...

It would take a singer/poet to have written this, so it's a natural that you did. I don't think it could be put much better why we do this, or do anything beautiful, despite the many failed tries; it's a first rate little love poem.

grapeling said...

Gee whiz, Mama Zen - the rhyme and meter and all that other stuff still doesn't matter, nor can really capture what you do here.

kaykuala said...

Wonderful grind that leaves one breathless. Nicely MZ!

Hank

Mary said...

Bravo!

Lorraine said...

always leave them wanting more, I do...exquisite poetry, applause mama Zen

Outlawyer said...

great sharp sound, thanks. k. manicddaily

Sharp Little Pencil said...

Mama, sounds like somebody has a partner on the road... and that the tune is put out to them, wherever they may be.

But then, I was married the first time to a musician...!

This is a quizzical, lovely work. Amy

Claudia said...

oh it def. would...