Saturday, September 21, 2013

Burn

Flint/strike consonants
kindle my tongue
till flames lick the vowels
and my lips burn
with your name.

At Real Toads, Dr. Hisashi Nakamura is sharing his thoughts on the writing of tanka.

16 comments:

Kathryn said...

You have such a great way with words. Love this.

grapeling said...

smoking. pun intended :)

Hannah said...

Awesome. MZ!!

Outlawyer said...

It is wonderful how you separate out the consonants and vowels here and give clear tones to each. Really creative and well done, MZ. Karin of Manicddaily (on mobile device.). K.

Kerry O'Connor said...

The idea of a name being a tactile entity which can be felt in the mouth, even burn, is very original.

Susie Clevenger said...

Wow! You are the goddess of saying so much with such few words!

Nataša Dolenc said...

..my lips burn with your name.. very powerful.

Björn said...

I love the ambiguity in that last line... the burn can mean so many things... loss, passion...

Fireblossom said...

sounds incendiary!

Lorraine said...

Dangerously romantic, but then again isn't all romance dangerous to your heart :)

Heaven said...

burn your name, flaming tanka MZ ~

Marian said...

oooh, hot!

LaTonya Baldwin said...

Sensual and I'm partial to sound devices. Great on the tongue.

Loredana Donovan said...

Hot and spicy :)

Ella said...

Oh, that could be a lot of licking ;D
Fun and spicy!

Margaret said...

"kindle my tongue"... Wow. You have just an awesome gift with words... (your husband must never win an argument :)