Mama--wow. you caught me up in this one.
A succinct and powerful depiction.
I can't decide which way to go with this. In my gut, I feel disturbed. Thanks for making me think.
That was 'bloody good.'
Oy, you're such a troublemaker. Great macabre sketch, scary a little.
Life and death and rites of passage... all in a day's work.
hope the holy ghost dont get you...just saying...what an interesting picture that becomes....
loved this and some others on your blog as well-- I'll be checking out more! ~peace, Jason
This is thought provoking--and will stay with me for a while I think!
Good writing makes us laugh or cry or ponder...
Really love this! I can't resist a good religious allusion, especially done so poetically
Thought provoking and good!
Mysterious and beautiful.Frightening also in a way! Nicely MZ!Hank
Whew! This is very powerful ... and pagan!
Lordy. Gory, weird stuff, but with a sort of magicked blessing/ dark warning at the end.
Short, not sweet, a little horrific. I know that's what you were going for, and you did it well.
Wow, this is very powerful.
What an image you painted MZ ~
O! Lesson learned, beautifully, grotesquely. Behind all the words, actual sacrifice.
Interesting - hunting and passover. A buck, mature sexually, instead of an innocent lamb and in summer...hmmmm
This conjured images of the Jews putting lamb's blood on their doorways so their firstborn would not be killed in the Plagues.Weaves a spell, chills my spine. BRILL. Amy
Tension tight and quick release puts me in mind of some kind of Hitchcockian slice maybe with some Lynch in the mix: making a perfect piece of cut image pushing into the sense of peace, or creepy comfort I feel in the repeat.
Deep! Just plain deep.
edgy and profound. wonderful!
Loved the way you combine Biblical narrative, figure of speech, and vivid detail to create an image both powerful and clever.
Wonderful writing, those last three repeating lines like a litany. You had to know I'd love this one!
shivers a sacrifice for nothing...how do you do that?
Oh, Mama! You nailed this one --perfect. Not an unnecessary word or thought in this. Wowzers!
Such a stark and horrifying image. I honestly believe that you are one of the most significant poets on the blogs - and I say that with no offence intended to anyone.
Succinct and powerful. Excellent MZ.Anna :o]
6! My favorite number!The rest was great too2!
Honestly, as an animal lover this kinda grossed me out (to use an old fashioned term) but there's no doubt about your talent, Mamma. :)
So many "edges" in this old religious practice when it's brought to life like this! A macabre kind of light. Stunning.
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