Sunday, July 21, 2013

Penny Said

Penny said to Pocket Cross,
"I've an offering for your plate.
Lincoln always loved the Lord,
but I kept a separate state.
Still, in this khaki cavalry,
I've come to love your ways.
So, I'll be yours for all I'm worth,
if you don't make me change."

For the Sunday Mini-Challenge at Real Toads.  Also submitted to Poetry Pantry.

25 comments:

Fireblossom said...

If you don't make me change. *snork*

Marian said...

hahaha!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Snap!

This just rattles along with its rhythm and rhyme! As Shay notes, the last line says it all.

TALON said...

I'm giggling over here, Mama Zen, and nearly spilled my coffee. Loved it! :)

Sioux said...

The last line IS snort-worthy, Mama Zen.

Susan said...

HaHaHa. Love. I wish I had written this. Still laughing!

Sylvia K said...

Thanks for the laugh to start my day!! Love it!

nissa_loves_cats said...

Very amusing, skillful use of rhyme, which is rare these days. A winner.

Mary said...

I do love the play on the word 'change' here. Very clever!!

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Also giggling over here--clever and witty write!

Brian Miller said...

ha...nice wordplay through out mz...playing on the penny...how much do we take hoping only to change it into what we really want....

Maggie Grace said...

Sweet thoughts! I finally just heard the video on my phone. Laptop doesn't do YouTube. Hmm another poem? Lol. Please don't make me change...priceless.

Maggie Grace said...

I thought I was the only one who snorked besides whales!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I LOVE "if you dont make me change".......brilliant!

Susie Clevenger said...

I am right in there with the others, I love "if you don't make me change." A penny and a pocket cross...suck a creative take on the prompt!

Kay L. Davies said...

I agree, "if you don't make me change" is the ultimate in final lines for love letters, and a perfect pun! Fabulous, MZ, fabulous.
K

mindlovemisery said...

This is just wonderful to read and so true =)

SaraV said...

Very fun and excellent rhyme--plus always love a well placed pun:-)

Claudia said...

haha...how cool...no.. let's don't make penny change..ha

Lolamouse said...

Clever girl!

Ella said...

Brilliance in your change ;D

Outlawyer said...

Very clever and distilled. K. (Manicddaily)

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Deft wordplay here, loved the personification.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Clever stuff indeed - well done MZ.
Anna :o]

Hannah said...

I just love the conversation within khaki! Excellent and love the ending! :)