Monday, July 22, 2013

Locked Room

Our messes mesh well, don't you think?
Dirty plates in the sink and slates on the brink
of never being clean.
Your scrips for day and mine for night -
no unaltered time
to think

or be driven to despair
by a longing to repair
our tears and tatters.

These things don't matter

in a locked room
without a key.

The Sunday Whirl words for Open Link Monday at Real Toads

23 comments:

Susan said...

"no unaltered time
to think"

WOW! It Matters! Maintains! Mal-nourishes!

The poem reads like a lock down in progress along with the philosophy behind it for the country, institution, home, mind ...

Mary said...

Sounds like hell to me. Time to kick the door.

Marian said...

never a clean slate, ack.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

WOW! "In a locked room without a key". I have been in that room. Once out, you never go back!

Misky said...

Kick down that darned door!

kaykuala said...

or be driven to despair
by a longing to repair
our tears and tatters

Real tough here, MZ! It's not a bed of roses apparently! Nice write!

Hank

brenda w said...

This is a rough one...being locked in a room with no key. Even if the messes mesh...

LaTonya Baldwin said...

old love has tatters. Enjoyed.

Sioux said...

Nice internal rhyme in the first half. No matter what form or what topic, you always deliver something fabulous, Mama Zen...

Kay L. Davies said...

"in a locked room without a key" ...brrr!
A great write, MZ.
K

Susie Clevenger said...

There's a whole lot in this one..."locked room without a key" says so much. Great write!

Ella said...

Yikes! I think I know where the key might be hidden ;D
Well done MZ

Brian Miller said...

dang...those last couple lines put it all in perspective, now dont they....

Dave King said...

Delicious!

Lorraine said...

where get I get a key?

gasp and wow

Outlawyer said...

An awful thought to think of all the medication - the locked room could just as well be a cupboard. Thanks. k. (Karin, Manicddaily).

Kerry O'Connor said...

Our messes mesh well...

What an excellent thought and line as intro to your piece!

Buddah Moskowitz said...

The hardest thing about your poems is that I covet your obvious talent. This was a mad little gift to the world, thanks.

Victoria said...

I read this thinking of closed minds. Not a good place to be.

Fireblossom said...

Grim. It teases a little bit at the start, before going straight down into darkness.

Kathie Brown said...

Well, I don't know where you were going with this but my first impression is of an abused woman. Succinctly said.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Lovely natural flow to the wordle words MZ - they stumped me due to clouded thought.

Excellent - as usual!

Anna :o]

Nanka said...

Oh! the messy mesh!!

"or be driven to despair
by a longing to repair"
spells hope!! Need the key!!