Friday, July 12, 2013

Blinded Proper

Poor thing.
So unstructured.
What could he have been
if he'd been
blinded proper
like me?

Poor thing.
So cluttered.
She can't go where I've been.
She's chained
to her map,
but can't see

the equator snake off the side of the page
as the latitudes loop
and the longitudes stage
a laughing rebellion
that plays out
beneath the notice

of those who won't know us
and our wild, wondrous strange.

For Marian's prompt at Real Toads

16 comments:

Marian said...

ooooh love! love.
wild, wondrous strange. yes, yes!
xo

Lorraine said...

contrast is magnificent,and always you wandering If you're getting the proper interpretation, I love this!!!

Helen said...

Perfection ... Veda would have a field day with your lyrics. I've listened to a few of her recordings this morning ~~ WOW!

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love that image of the Equator snaking off the map... (Read: Damn, why didn't I think of that..Rats!!)
It is quite something to achieve an unstructured structure in Art - you have done so with aplomb!

Susan said...

Fun deconstruction of The Map, if only we could all be blind enough to it to see. I enjoy the voice in this poem--I wouldn't want the narrator to say "poor her" about me--so I could be cool, or I could be the emperor standing here in new clothes.

Brian Miller said...

rather like me some wild wonderous strange...sad some will never know it....the snake/equator stanza is my fav

Other Mary said...

Oh, love this! My fav lines are:

She's chained
to her map,
but can't see

the equator snake off the side of the page
as the latitudes loop
and the longitudes stage
a laughing rebellion

hedgewitch said...

I haven't had any strange in too many years...(yeah, blame g-man and his puns for that one) or maybe I'm already set-up with an overdose. I like the way this gyrates, from the first crows-wing view of the blind sage to the last satisfied wriggle of being real.

Fireblossom said...

This sounds a little subversive. I'm shocked.

Mary said...

"Chained to her map but can't see the equator....." -- love this description and what it invokes. Another winner here, MZ.

kaykuala said...

a laughing rebellion
that plays out
beneath the notice

That's right, MZ! Little things of insignificant value may just lead us astray affecting the bigger picture! Great!

Hank

Sam Edge said...

Very much in line with the prompt

juzta mum said...

Loved it...Poor thing,So cluttered.She can't go where I've been.She's chained to her map,but can't see...Wow!!

Heaven said...

Love that ending MZ ~ Happy weekend ~

Margaret said...

...blinded proper. What a great description. And the last line... sigh. Gorgeous.

LaTonya Baldwin said...

Oh, so there witht the closing. Strangely wonderful.