Wednesday, June 12, 2013

Offering Up

Failing to find a fixed point,
I became one.
The sanest statue
in this field of freaks.
My limbs have loosened lately,
but I've yet to run.
I'm still offering up the art
I've made of me.

For Izy's prompt at Real Toads

20 comments:

Brian Miller said...

smiles. you make good art of you mz...nice opening lines...rather profound on becoming the fixed point...

Fireblossom said...

I love it. I liked "field of freaks", the title and the way you worked it in, and the hint that she may bolt soon, but for now, she's Being Art. Much the coolness, MZ.

hedgewitch said...

Yes--I can see that...it's hard to abandon a pose so hardly won, and if it is admired, no matter by whom, after all, how much harder to let go of that.Really a perceptive and twisty piece, MZ.

henna ink said...

This is definitely on my top-ten list of MZ faves.

Susan said...

Statuesque! The moment of movement would change everything. I can't help thinking of the Langston Hughes poem "I too"--when you are ready, everyone will see how beautiful you are ...

Sioux said...

I especially loved "sanest statue" and "field of freaks."

HITF do you do it? So many gems in just a few lines...

Patricia A. McGoldrick said...

I would like to echo your comment--very clever! :)

Kay L. Davies said...

First, I just had to count the number of words. Then I forgot the exact number, but I know it wasn't 40.
My question is the same as Sioux's. How DO you do it? You never fail to amaze me. I love what Shay calls "being art" — I've actually seen women do that at parties. Most odd.
K

Maggie Grace said...

"failing to find a fixed point" is brilliant to me. The video had me shaken up with no focal point. Your expressions are well done and in few words captured that insanity.

Susie Clevenger said...

"I'm still offering up the art I've made of me." Love that!

Isadora Gruye said...

holy MZ! This blows doors down. When reading this, I had assumed it was written around the Mr. Merde character, and I love how you have internalized him.

In fact, my favorite part of the clip is when the photographer is taking his photo, and the camera pans the Mr. Merde character in this music video, self aware way. That is such a brilliant moment to me, and I have been wracking my brain thinking of how to capture it just as brilliantly in poem; to me you have done just that. Viva la!

Helen said...

Brevity thy name is Mama ~ love offering up the art *which you have.

Lorraine said...

statues don't feel, do you have room for one more?

Excellent

Dave King said...

I have the thought that this couldn't have been said any other way.

ayala said...

Very cool, you make good art.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I read this as the thoughts of the super-model, poised and professional while all hell breaks loose around her. Brilliant choice of perspective which works with or without the clip.

Lolamouse said...

The true artist is not disturbed by the chaos around him/her but is inspired by it! Ha!

Marian said...

cool.

TALON said...

oooh! I loved this, Mama Zen.

Hannah said...

Being the art!! So cool!!