Friday, May 31, 2013

The Tracks


Fair spring brings her green
to both sides of the tracks.
Then, cruel summer gazes stern
and burns the poor side back.

When the rails are too hot to touch,
the price is too high to ride
that train that cuts the country
between the wet and dry.

Some fools will write of water
with dime store fountain pens
and stand with buckets 'neath a blue sky
waiting for the drought to end.

But, me, I'll ink a ticket
and forge myself a way
to get this poor man's daughter
off these tracks and on that train.

For Hannah's prompt at Real Toads

17 comments:

Fireblossom said...

God loves a pragmatist!

Susie Clevenger said...

Ah, a goal I think she shall achieve.

kaykuala said...

She'll come around.The pull of love is a strong motivator! Nicely MZ!

Hank

Hannah said...

I love your imagination, Mama Zen!! Such a cool tale you've bled from this!!

I love this part:

"Some fools will write of water
with dime store fountain pens"

Awesome...thank you for writing!

Brian Miller said...

heck you dont need no ticket, just jump that train...great opening stanza with green on both sides but then the poor getting burned back...take that initiative...

Margaret said...

Leave it to you to create a heart and soul for this image.
Gorgeous.

Kay L. Davies said...

This is an incredible write, MZ. I love the two sides of the tracks, and the fools with buckets, waiting.
I hope this poor man's daughter got off those tracks and on that train.
K

Kerry O'Connor said...

Wonderful! Wonderful!

I applaud the final stanza!

Lorraine said...

every word, every sentence, every space in between, draws me in so deep I find it hard to leave,so I go back and read it again

Heaven said...

Love the story MZ, specially the last verse ~

hedgewitch said...

'When the rails are too hot to touch,
the price is too high to ride..'

even the weather is heaviest on the poor--the narrator however, finds a way, as the desperate usually do...love the metaphor, and the imagery in this, especially the first stanza.

Helen said...

... another gem from M. Zen.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Fantastic response! I totally love it. My fave response to the prompt:)

Carol Steel said...

I love the first verse. You create new ways of seeing the ordinary in life. And then give it a further twist.

gabrielle said...

Two sides of the track--the disparities can be stark, especially when viewed under the unforgiving glare of peak summer sun. Resourcefulness and grit, you got it!

Emma Major said...

you go girl

Pat Tillett said...

I really like the feel. Makes me think of the depression era.