Tuesday, May 14, 2013

Engraved

She's marked
as his
with diamond musk
and pearl piss.
Her dog collar
noose necklace
displayed.

And should she slip
the leash,
he'll burn the beauty
to beast.
Erase her
remake her
engraved.

For Open Link Night at dVerse

20 comments:

Björn said...

great and worrysome.

henna ink said...

This is freaking awesome, girl. I love your fiesty poems the best.

My favorites are the slammin' opening:
"She's marked
as his"

This:
"Her dog collar
noose necklace
displayed"

And the whole second stanza. So yeah, all of it. ;)

Man, you amaze me. Your short, quick stabs dig in deep every time.

Brian Miller said...

yikes...this has some grit to it mz....first the least but also what happens should she slip that noose...

TALON said...

Dark and chilling and totally captivating.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Bril - creepy bril - but bril nonetheless.

Pearl piss has great multiple meanings.

He's an alpha male gone mad.

Sometimes those diamonds and pearls are more costly than first imagined.

I hate how much I covet your talent.

Mosk d N-V-S

Fireblossom said...

This may be gold-gilt, but it isn't sugar-coated. And, while the meaning is dark, the wording is beautiful.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Gritty and truthful --makes me think a bit again --

Mary said...

To remake her engraved gives me chills!

Grace said...

The ending sounds like a nightmare, not an empty threat at all ~

Laurie Kolp said...

I wasn't quite expecting this when I first read diamond... this one bites. LOL

Akila G said...

scary to think what happens when she slips the noose!! nice capture

Lorraine said...

You write horror beautifully, more disturbing is that it's true...in both reality and fiction, gave me shivers

aka_andrea said...

this one grabs you! knowing you, she will slip the noose and you will write that with the same wicked twist!

Dana Dampier said...

Oooh, chilling and very awesome!!

Susan said...

OH! he can too, I mean, I have suspected they do. Stepford wives.

manicddaily said...

Yikes. k.

Grandmother said...

It's a steep price to pay. This is scary great.

my heart's love songs said...

chilling!

ayala said...

Chilling and captivating!

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Ooh, goose-bumpy.