Wednesday, April 3, 2013

Sugarcoat

Sunk deep
in a spring peeper night.
Me, here, and you, there.

I wrap
my sugarcoat tight.
At least we share

the same moon.

Hopefully passing for existential for Kerry's prompt at Real Toads

24 comments:

Kerry O'Connor said...

Always the same moon, a constant object, an inexact symbol, a beacon in the dark.

Lovely inquiry into the you - me together yet separate conundrum of life.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Sounds like an existential dilemma to me. :)

hedgewitch said...

It always amazes me how you can set the mood with so few words, so completely. Agree with Kerry--what is more an existential quandary than the question you ask here.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Like Joy, I am always impressed with how much you are able to express so succinctly. Awesome poem, kiddo!

Marian said...

love this. do we? do we! huh! huh!?

manicddaily said...

Spring peeper night. A wonderful phrase and concept. k .

Brian Miller said...

mmm...somethings it is hard to sugar coat...and there is a distance between being together and being together...

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Sounds existential to me--but what do I know?

Sabio Lantz said...

There is always to moon to deluding us that we aren't separate!

Kay L. Davies said...

"or do we?"
A world of questions in three little words.
K

Peggy said...

I enjoyed reading this short piece. Made me think!

Fireblossom said...

Of course we do. I love the title and how you used it as if it were a literal coat, in the body of the poem.

Mary said...

Simple, yet deep! I enjoyed this.

Sylvia K said...

Love it as always!! So much in so few!

Other Mary said...

Awww - great last line.

Helen said...

No sugarcoating from me .... this is excellent! Plain and simple.

Susie Clevenger said...

I didn't wear my sugarcoat today...so glad you did.. :)

annell said...

Yes, it happens so many time...look up and think of all the others looking at the same moon.

Emma Major said...

always, probably :)

Susan said...

When the question can be asked,sugar coats.

Dave King said...

Exactly so: we are all isolates, and all bound up with each other - the true existential dilemma. Powerful thought.

Fireblossom said...

I love the change you made. Now it's a really cool poem, much stronger for being sharply focused--something you're so good at.

Jinksy said...

And sharing the moon is so comforting...

Margaret said...

...a spring peeper night

Love that. I used to sit on my back deck in Michigan and listen to the frogs in the marshy ditches below the cow pasture.... And the moon is always witness to our loneliness.. Loved this.