14 words. I can't even order a pizza in 14 words, and you seem to tell a whole relationship in miniature.I love this. "Stories of fire" is so evocative, and i want to know why they seem to have had so little effect. (Does this person have a pulse?) And then to "feed" someone scars and ashes is just poetic. so get out of town.
bet that didnt taste good...smiles.intriguing little short mz...quite evocative for 13 words
14 words....shay counts better than i....
You can say it all in so few words!! Terrific!
I worry about those whom fire won't burn--or maybe it has to be their own fire. Scars and ashes are good enough for them.
Your metaphor is compact and extremely effective.
You are very adept with these short forms! Whew.
felt quite tragic to me. well done. k .
I read about eating ashes instead of bread in church yesterday. This captures the despair of loneliness.
Convincedyou area genius.(That's as succinct review as I can muster.)
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