I thought of you instantly when I heard there was a meme about short poetry!
MZ, this is breath taking. Truthfully, no kidding, when I read it I gasped!
Excellent very thought provoking.
So much said with so few words!!!!
argh, great writing.(which also, actually, fits the weekend theme at RT, showoff!)
You excel in short lines that pack a HUGE punch. This one is one of your best. Fantastically effective. It would be great on a poster hung in every transition house in North America. Seriously. If you create it, you could sell millions of them.
dang...a whole life in a few words...and what does sorry mean in the face of a fist....
Schiste! You drove the image, moment, message deeper in your perfect brevity than most journalists covering the stories.
Intense. The soundbite leaves me with a very powerful impression.
Nice !"Sorry" means a lot when you can see the fist relaxing.Precisely perfect.
Your poem just made me exclaim, "Ooh, Ooh..." not very eloquent, I know, but if you could hear the way I said them you'd understand....
So much said in 6 lines ~ Terrific piece MZ ~
Yes - agree with Shay - you are a master of short poems, MZ and this is wonderful. Also so interesting in that the gestures can be interpreted in slightly different ways. Thanks. Hope you are well. k.
ps - great great title too - k.
Many write to and of such pain - few manage to pack a poetic punch so tightly and directly to the gut .. between an "sorry" between an "open hand and a fist " WOW! Fabulous poem :)
Ouch. You are the best at finding these micro seconds that give me pause and insight.
wow! amazing to be so startled by so few words.
what a picture a few words can bring...nice
short - tight - yet a huge story
As always when I read one of your short masterpieces, I feel like there's nothing more to be said on the subject, that you've exposed the heart of it for us and made us look, even if looking is not enough to change anything--except ourselves.
This is excellent MZ. Love the analogy, sorry is a soundbite. very cool. Thanks
Ooh! That really packs a punch! (Pun inescapable; levity certainly not intended with such subject matter.)
And like all soundbites should not be believed. This is so true on the other hand.
Very clever. I feel it down to my knuckles.
I'm sure it's obvious, but I'm reading this as if she's biting her fist so that she does not scream over whatever is gutting her spirit. Secondary, to me, is the reading in which she is being beaten by another hand.
This little poem packed a wallop.
Just Perfect. Wow.
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