Sunday, March 3, 2013

Soundbite

Sorry
is a soundbite
she swallows

in the space
between an open hand
and a fist.

Micropoetry for Poetry Pantry and Poetics at dVerse

33 comments:

Sylvia K said...

Oh, yes!!!

Fireblossom said...

I thought of you instantly when I heard there was a meme about short poetry!

Mary said...

MZ, this is breath taking. Truthfully, no kidding, when I read it I gasped!

alan1704 said...

Excellent very thought provoking.

Gail said...

So much said with so few words!!!!

Marian said...

argh, great writing.
(which also, actually, fits the weekend theme at RT, showoff!)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

You excel in short lines that pack a HUGE punch. This one is one of your best. Fantastically effective. It would be great on a poster hung in every transition house in North America. Seriously. If you create it, you could sell millions of them.

Brian Miller said...

dang...a whole life in a few words...and what does sorry mean in the face of a fist....

Kim Nelson said...

Schiste! You drove the image, moment, message deeper in your perfect brevity than most journalists covering the stories.

Jessica Lynn Lang said...

Intense. The soundbite leaves me with a very powerful impression.

Sabio Lantz said...

Nice !
"Sorry" means a lot when you can see the fist relaxing.
Precisely perfect.

Serena Helriot said...

Your poem just made me exclaim, "Ooh, Ooh..." not very eloquent, I know, but if you could hear the way I said them you'd understand....

Heaven said...

So much said in 6 lines ~ Terrific piece MZ ~

Tara R. said...

Brutal.

manicddaily said...

Yes - agree with Shay - you are a master of short poems, MZ and this is wonderful. Also so interesting in that the gestures can be interpreted in slightly different ways. Thanks. Hope you are well. k.

manicddaily said...

ps - great great title too - k.

Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP) said...

Many write to and of such pain - few manage to pack a poetic punch so tightly and directly to the gut .. between an "sorry" between an "open hand and a fist "
WOW! Fabulous poem :)

Susan said...

Ouch. You are the best at finding these micro seconds that give me pause and insight.

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aka_andrea said...

wow! amazing to be so startled by so few words.

Wolfsrosebud said...

what a picture a few words can bring...nice

Old Ollie said...

short - tight - yet a huge story

hedgewitch said...

As always when I read one of your short masterpieces, I feel like there's nothing more to be said on the subject, that you've exposed the heart of it for us and made us look, even if looking is not enough to change anything--except ourselves.

Fred Rutherford said...

This is excellent MZ. Love the analogy, sorry is a soundbite. very cool. Thanks

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Ooh! That really packs a punch! (Pun inescapable; levity certainly not intended with such subject matter.)

uneven steven said...

awesome :-)

Grandmother said...

And like all soundbites should not be believed. This is so true on the other hand.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Perfect.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Perfect.

indieflower said...

Very clever. I feel it down to my knuckles.

indieflower said...

I'm sure it's obvious, but I'm reading this as if she's biting her fist so that she does not scream over whatever is gutting
her spirit. Secondary, to me, is the reading in which she is being beaten by another hand.

happygirl said...

This little poem packed a wallop.

Margaret said...

Just Perfect. Wow.