Wednesday, March 27, 2013

Parts

There's a blossom on the pear tree
for every body underneath.
The worms are fat as full moons;
they took all but the teeth.
But, if I should hear the click and clack
of calcium and bone,
I'll just bless your tell-tale parts . . .

and read more Poe.

For Words Count at Real Toads

26 comments:

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Creepy fun, this is.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Ooh! Great work on the rhythm and rhyme. Love the juxtaposition of pear tree and fat worms.

Sioux said...

That last line makes it all the more delicious...

I ordered your book. It should be on my doorstep next week (too cheap to pay for shipping, I always go for the free "supersaver" option).

I can hardly wait...

Emma Major said...

cool :)

Gail said...

One of my favorite authors.

Fireblossom said...

I can just picture you, reading away, unperturbed!

Ella said...

I agree this is creepy goodness!
I love these lines:

"The worms are fat as full moons;
they took all but the teeth.
But, if I should hear the click and clack
of calcium and bone,
I'll just bless your tell-tale parts . . ."

hedgewitch said...

All my parts are tell-tale, and they're still above ground. ;_)

Brian Miller said...

dang....def got an edge on this one mz....a flower for every body and the clicking of the bones...

Sylvia K said...

Oh, yes! Delightfully creepy!!! Love the clicking of the bones!!

ayala said...

The worms are fat as full moons...love it!

Kay L. Davies said...

"The click and clack of calcium and bone" is great, MZ. You certainly conjured Poe-like images from your poor innocent pear tree. I love it.
K

Sabio Lantz said...

Very fun.
Poe is going to be on many minds tonight I am sure.
I wonder if the rhythm would be better with a last line saying:

and read some more of Poe.

Then you'd be exactly 49 words -- 50 with the title.

Well, I am one to talk. I totally screwed up on the word count. I read the prompt when driving about writing something scary when looking out the window.
When I got home, I just quickly wrote, snapped a photo and posted. Sorry for the mistake.

Helen said...

Gotta say the fat worms totally freaked me out ... good stuff!!

Helen said...

.. posted the comment and realized the moon tonight is known as "Full Worm Moon" .... quite the clever poet you are!

Susan said...

Pear blossoms and fat worms and clattering bones . . . absolute Poe. It'll be a while before I eat pears without examining them. Neat getting the title in there!

Margaret said...

...I think you are Poe- reincarnate! My son LOVES E.A.P. and he bought be an amazing book a while back. I had forgotten and opened it up today. I didn't realize he did many poems with a bit of rhyme. !

manicddaily said...

Ha! And where's the black cat????

rashmenon said...

ooh, just Deliciously macabre! Hats off to you!

Jinksy said...

Nicely 'YUK!' hehehe...

Mary said...

This is so very clever, MZ. I just loved the ending....I should have seen it coming, but didn't. LOL.

Hannah said...

Ooo..shivers!!! Love this and that there's a blossom for every dead body!! Creepy. :)

Lolamouse said...

Yes, Poe the the perfect antidote to those creepy feelings! Ha!

Grandmother said...

Worms fattened on all the parts but the teeth- seriously creepy. This was a fun prompt even if Hedge took it to a whole new level!

Marian said...

love!!!! the rhyme totally adds to the creep factor. *runs off to rewrite and add rhyme*

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Whoa! I hadnt thought about the blossoms representing what's buried under. I will never look at a cherry tree the same way again!