Thursday, February 14, 2013

Third Date

by Joseph LoRusso

She had him

harder than a noose knot apple
before they ever left the diner.
Howling like a hollow tree
when the wicked wind blows right.

She might have been

shallow as a shyster's grave,
but she was deep enough for drowning
such a weak man in her waters
while she stayed safe and dry.

A Magpie in 55 words for my G-Man!

20 comments:

Brian Miller said...

haha...what games she plays with men...smiles. howling hollow...wicked wind...nice allit in them as well...

Mary said...

She definitely knows how to use her feminine wiles! He seems oblivious to what he is in for.

Sylvia K said...

Ah, yes!! She knows how to play the game!

Helena said...

You go, girl! That's him snared, then!

rallentanda said...

Sounds as if they deserve each other.Weak coupled with the shallow!

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

She got 'im! Great piece--just snappy! Loved that!

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Echo rallentanda.

Anna :o]

Fireblossom said...

*snork!*

I like the hollow tree and the "shallow as a shyster's grave".

hedgewitch said...

You put a little original sin into commonplace darkness--I like what Shay liked, plus 'she was deep enough for drowning'

g-man said...

Mama Zen...
Harder than a WHAT?
It must be an Okie similie
Whatever.... It was perfect!
This whole story was perfect!
It was well worth the wait for your sparadic but always enjoyable Gems.
Loved your 55
Thanks for playing, I really feel honored because I know you have other obligations. Have a Kick Ass Week End... G

PattiKen said...

Excellent, MZ.

Helen said...

... here's to the strong women of the world!!!

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Wickedly good and goodly wicked.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Love it!!

Yvonne Osborne said...

Lovely, and the Magpie image is perfect for a 55er. What I loved best: "such a weak man in her waters while she stayed safe and dry."

You've done this really well.

izzy said...

Oh I don't know how I missed this! great job!Howling like a hollow
tree ! thanks.

Myrna R. said...

Your mind works stupendously. This is quite a non-romantic romance. What a unique story.

Margaret said...

Sizzlin' HOT as usual! All that packed into 55?

Dick Jones said...

Some very neat metaphors and similes bouncing around in this depiction of love-as-lasso.

Heidi said...

"she was deep enough for drowning" what an awesome line. I think that I want to be her for a while...