Friday, February 22, 2013

Dragon

Gumball Shadowscales, my daughter's bearded dragon

I can see the pale root of the candlelight -
birth blue and naked, the feeding hand.
Faces held by imaginary night
hover haggard like moons above the sand.
"Oh, look how he scurries!  Look how he climbs!"
shrill the voices hiding behind steel doors.
Then, under my belly warm fingers slide,
and I'm not in the desert anymore,

but am flying, wingless, fast through the sky
once more to stare a bold knight in the eye.

The Sunday Whirl words for Hannah's Transforming Friday prompt at Real Toads

32 comments:

Peggy said...

Wonderful getting into the point of view of the animal here. Like the photo of the horned toad as well.

Karen said...

Caged, fenced...I'm seeing a pattern here. I do like the knight analogy, though. It isn't quite as sinister as those unseen fencers of the other poems.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

"hover haggard like moons above the sand" - what a cool line that is. Baby Puppy's bearded dragon has a great name!

Fireblossom said...

This is nothing but adorable.

Brian Miller said...

just another pet...you know....smiles.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Very original pov...the feeding hand. And the last two lines are just wonderful.

Helen said...

Gumball Shadowscales ... great name. I like the sliding warm fingers under belly line!!!

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Sylvia K said...

Love it!!!

Heidi said...

This was fun to read. I like that there is a child's perspective in there as well. That, and I really want to meet this pet!

Susan said...

My nephew and his wife live with a bearded dragon and seem to be able to tell her moods. I think their dragon thinks more like yours and prefers not to be brought up to the eye, the dull moons being close enough. I've never read a longer poem by you! Dragon magic.

Ella said...

Gorg! <3 it!
Love these lines:
" I can see the pale root of the candlelight -
birth blue and naked, the feeding hand.
Faces held by imaginary night
hover haggard like moons above the sand."

Mixi said...

I love the picture of Gumball in his tank. A very unique take on the prompt Mama Zen. I'm sure that's how Gumball feels, especially when he's flying without wings :)

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love the way you created distance between the pet owner and the wild creature (faces...like haggard moons)and then the intimacy of contact with a finger beneath the belly.

Emma Major said...

oh you are clever, this is funny and poignant and true, wello done

Mary said...

What fun! (And what a unique pet for your daughter to have!)

Margaret said...

These words evoke the braveness of this little creature...last line really made me smile.

Hannah said...

Oh, wow!! Mama Zen...you capture in first person...er...lizard ;) the experience of the largeness and freedom of the desert and switch the experience to the heartbreaking capture...I feel so bad for creatures that are in cages...they belong in the wild.

Beautiful...and I love your moon description. ♥

Hannah said...

Mama!! I'm embarrassed...I read again...I read into this in a different way...as you can see from my comment.

These lizard are bred in captivity to begin with any way...

Apologies...my imagination went in a different direction with this. :)

Grace said...

I specially like the flying, wingless and fast in the last two lines ~ Good work here MZ ~

Chhavi Vatwani said...

What a splendid picture! And you've very nicely written this through his perspective!

hedgewitch said...

The child and animal mind merge here, into something that seems just exactly like the way such a 'dragon' would think and feel. Really cool, MZ.

ayala said...

Nice :)

Carol Steel 5050 said...

I enjoyed the pov of the lizard very much. It threw me at first until I re-read it and my brain clicked into what you were really saying. Lovely work as always.

Shawna said...

Yeah, I dig this, especially:

"I can see the pale root of the candlelight -
birth blue and naked"

"Faces held by imaginary night"

"shrill the voices hiding behind steel doors"

"Then, under my belly warm fingers slide"

Susie Clevenger said...

The world through lizard eyes...Wonderful piece!

Claudia said...

oh that bold knight..hold him tight...smiles...such a cool fellow..i mean both...the knight and the dragon...smiles

Kim Nelson said...

Those bold knights... they sneak in and catch us unawares, don't they? And then all we can do is join in, enjoy. ;-)

happygirl said...

Gumball Shadowscales is a great name. I think the transformation derived from the touch transporting the mind is perfect. You always find the words.

TALON said...

It was awesome to see the the world from a completely different perspective. Very cool, Mama Zen.

izzy said...

Very transformative! Wow, thanks-

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De said...

i absolutely love this. My son has a beardie. When he basks, I take notes. ;)

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