What do you do with the wolf
when the coffee and crumpets are gone?
Do you cradle him
to your shriveled breasts
for suckle, sleep, and song?
Do you let him lick clouds from your belly
till sky quivers quiet to ground?
Or, do you just stand aside,
polite and wide-eyed,
and watch
as he blows the house down?
Submitted to Poetry Pantry
26 comments:
Me, I would watch and learn and become a wolf girl.
PS--do you remember what I was saying about your pure use of language, and how your stuff flows?
"till sky quivers quiet to ground?"
Like that. That's what I meant!
Oh, this is great. I love the metaphor. No, I hope we don't just watch while he blows the house down. Hope we build a house of bricks.
Do you let him lick clouds from your belly
till sky quivers quiet to ground?
ha...love that bit...well first, dont run out of coffee...that is bad news...ha...but here is hoping the house dont blow down...
Well, the wolf is at the door hard to know what to do. You've given some great options. Agree with shay -great language throughout. Up to snuff. K.
I would imagine if you did line 3, 4 and 5, it would be a quick breast reduction.
(Hey, I can't sound even close to intelligent as Shay, so I opted for levity today.)
I love this poem on so many levels, the imagery, the metaphor, the reference to fairy tales, etc. Well done, fellow poet, well done.
Hmmmm, I would like a third alternative, please????
You did yourself proud today, MZ.
Usually non-violent, I would have to say:
keep a snare in the hall off the kitchen,
lure him in,
string him up,
hear him bay.
I think this is one of your very best poems. Excellent sound/rhyme/rhythm throughout. Punchy, straight to the gut poetry. And do let me know when you discover the answer. I sort of like your first suggestion.
You show how to make rhyme tough and serious in this one, without losing one iota of grace. Fine writing, MZ.
Mama, "Do you let him lick clouds from your belly," the best line. This is funny, but it also has an astonishingly good flow to it. Nicely done! Amy
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My some tough questions..couldn't write a favorite line because I loved all of it!!
nice MZ. love how you incorporated the Romulus/Remus allusion, the Three Pigs and great line in clouds from your belly. Great read. Thanks
nice MZ. love how you incorporated the Romulus/Remus allusion, the Three Pigs and great line in clouds from your belly. Great read. Thanks
Wow.
Just wow.
*sigh*
...stand aside, polite and wide-eyed,
I love your way with a phrase.
Pray that the ground swallows you up immediately and then you do not have to make any decisions.
THE question of these times! Converting the wolf would be a great option, but I agree that it may not exist. I am caught up in the rhythm of the questions, inhaling a huge NO by the end, but exhaling only a gasp. Now this poem is in my belly. I fear we will be left eating words.
Keep plenty of coffee and crumpets, maybe dose up the coffee make him past smooth out.
Oh my!! Loved reading this (several times) I too hoped for a third option but since there doesn't seem to be one...my answer to your question.......never stand aside and be polite!!
You're a fabulous poet, MZ. I'm with Shay on the line "till sky quivers quiet to ground" — a line that's a delight to read because it moves so easily and yet so thrillingly.
K
No coffee? No crumpet?
No wolf.
(A fun read!)
"till sky quivers quiet to ground"
just blows me away!
i must admit though that the thought of suckling a wolf is a tad too perv for me. {giggle}
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I love any poem about a wolf, but especially one where he gets served crumpets and tea. When it comes to wolves, they pretty much do what they want. Some great lines in this, kiddo.
Hey Z Mom, help save the wolves in Wyoming !!!
Nursery rhymes don't come true. Do they, ...
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